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The Secrets Of Inheritance City My er ... IF story ^_^ Rate Topic: -----

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Post icon  Posted 24 February 2007 - 06:25 AM

I've decided to write my version of an Inheritance Forums story. I tried to make it as true and fair as I could, but if you guys don't like something in your character or character's plot, just tell me tongue.gif


The Heroes:∙ *emerald dream* - ED (The main heroine and leader of the rebels group. A 13-year-old novice soldier with some magical abilities, who is under SMJ's training after his eagerness to teach her how to fight along with the other rebels against the common enemies; Matthew, EyesOnly and Aaron)

∙ SergantMajorJefforson - SMJ (An extremely talented ex-soldier, no matter his young age. He is the most compatible with weaponry and military stuff, as long as ED's mentor and loyal friend in difficult times)

∙ Alvar Chronus - Alvar (Some say he had a dark past, but he's learnt to hide it well. Being friends with ED since childhood, his unbeatable skills in solving problems and passing through complicated labyrinths makes him a very helpful ally when comes to issues of need)

∙ Aiedail Shadeslayer - Dail (Slightly crazy and deviant, Dail can forget her important position in the rebels group sometimes. Thankfully, her friends always /wake her up/ and remind her the rest of conditions. Except that, she will always be there for her loved ones)

∙ Edoc'sil Ebrithil - Edoc (The co-leader of the group. Known as cynical and sarcastic when her mood is up to, she knows how to deal with the enemy, one way or another. She's always catching the attention in public places, but is a true friend. Edoc has a very good heart. In the past, she has thought of leaving the rebels group, but ED brought her back to reality)

∙ EyesOnly and Aaron (Two of Matthew's faithful, no doubt powerful spies, who are trying to find a way of /breaking/ the rebels. Since ED always escaped them, they will never find D.W.N.T.U, the secret basement of the group)

∙ murtagh's second brother - MSB (Missing for long, experienced and strong, he never had the willing to join either sides. He has a reputation for some mad secret skills in ninja fighting, while ED hopes he will appear to help the rest beat IF tyranny)

∙ ICEAN (One of ED's closest friends, he is good in piloting helicopters and planes. Inventive and encouraging, he will never stop fighting the dark side)

Prologue: The story is located in year 2020, after Arthryn's, the mighty president's death. No one knows who killed her. Dark times outshoned IF. Now, this small and cheerful community became a gloomy, hostile city where nobody can entrust anyone. Matthew stole control and imposed tyranny to every member of the forums. Poverty and misery filled people's hearts, and they lived hoping for a miracle. But one day, a young girl thought about the sad future which'll overtake IF if the tyranny continued. Her name was ED. After some months, she finally managed to call and inform her old friends, who responded fast. ED, SMJ, Dail, Alvar, Edoc and Icean created secretly a rebels group, while they all sworn loyalty and friendship to the group and to each other. Their basement is somewhere deep, in the Tunnels section. It's called D.W.N.T.U, and each member has one pass card, who will try not to lose or reveal.

This, was the last hope of IF citizens. Six heroes, who will die to save IF humanity. Secrets, hate, jealousy and hard conditions will shake their strong relationship. Will they attempt to take the tyrant down, or not? It's in fate's hands ...


CHAPTER ONE


It was a cold, quite an ordinary night of October's last days. The starry sky, equally bright as the moon itself, lit the RPG forum with a mysterious silver light.

SMJ stared at an owl, nearby the closest tree. Wind howled, sending a frozen breeze right on his face. He shivered and pulled up his elastic but extra protective armour's collar and lifted his M107 bit higher, ready for everything. “Come on, ED! Where are you?”, the young soldier thought impatiently.

Suddenly, a loud crack shook the night's silence. SMJ quickly stood up from the fallen track he was sitting. Running as fast as he could, he reached the hill's lowest spot. He hid behind a short bush. With rush, the boy snatched a pair of binoculars out of his pocket and looked at three dark siluettes below. The one that was ahead, like SMJ correcly distinguished, was ED on her motorcycle, “The Shade”. It was a war vehicle model, but very helpful and fast. SMJ narrowed his eyes. The two others in pursuit of ED, were EyesOnly and Aaron, with almost as fast vehicles.

Fortunately, she was far ahead. Once she started approaching SMJ's spot, the rebel put the binoculars in his pocket and jumped off the hill's edge, sliding down with his military boots' heels. He landed just the time ED was passing through with incredible speed. She stopped her motorcycle's machine and turned to look at SMJ. “It was about time! Are you okay?”, he asked the other rebel. ED nodded and breathed with alleviation. “I think so ... now come on! We must get to the gate quickly!”, she responded. EyesOnly and Aaron were reaching them. SMJ hesitated for a second, but jumped on “The Shade”. ED kicked the ground, flicked her hair and headed for the gate to Inheritance City.

The two rebels reached the spot, right before EyesOnly and Aaron catch them up. On the second “The Shade” was passing through the old gate, ED heard Aaron swearing badly. She stopped driving, slipped off and closed the metal gates with SMJ's help. “That was close”, she said and sat down to rest. SMJ looked around. They were in the city's suburbs, an area rather dangerous for newbies. ED sighed and stood up. Her cellphone rang. “Who is it?”, she answered.

“It's me, Dail”, a known voice heard. “Edoc said she wants a small conference”. “We'll be there in a while”, ED replied and closed her cellphone. “Edoc has to tell us something”, she informed SMJ. The other rebel nodded and lifted his shoulders. Both looked around. The area was empty and cloudy, as always. “We'd better be careful here. Nobody knows what will happen.”, she said while SMJ was jumping on. Soon, they've arrived in the distant Tunnels Section, where their basement was located.

ED stopped in front of a Griffon's statue. She and SMJ took out a small pass card. The statue's grey eyes suddenly became bright green. ED touched the Griffon, while whispering something. SMJ did the same. Then, the statue growled and opened a small opening among the wall, where a ladder appeared. The two of them looked around. Still silence. They entered the opening, while the Griffon was becoming a simple statue again. An ordinary staircase appeared in their view. It was tall, as high as they could see. SMJ and ED climbed it to the end, where another door appeared.

It was half open. ED walked ahead and entered in. She saw Edoc, Dail and Alvar looking at a map, around a big table in the middle. Edoc raised her eyebrows. “Welcome back”, the three other members greeted them. “And what was the importance?”, ED asked. Edoc didn't answer immediately. She had a sad expression on her face. “You know, the city is in its worst phase, people live under pityful conditions, and Matthew grows stronger every single day it passes. We must do a strike out to him”. ED nodded her head. “I completely agree with this, but since Icean is gone to his place for information, we can do nothing. I've warned him not to go there.”, the young rebel sighed.

Without a warn, ED felt a small pain in her right hand's scar she had since childhood. “What ... ?”, she said and rubbed her hand. “Is everything okay?”, SMJ asked. ED stared at the floor. “The scar ... it's trying to tell me something”, she whispered. Alvar walked towards her. “Has this happened again?”, he asked. The girl thought for a moment. Long ago, she and Shadow_Blade, an old member of the group were imprisoned in the Matthew's tower. They've managed to escape, but suddenly, ED had a strange feeling. SB left behind, while the old tower was exploding.

ED teared in that thought. SB was like her brother, she missed him so much. She has sworn to their friendship she will take revenge from Matthew in the future. And then, an idea passed through her mind like an electruction. “Icean is in danger. We must save him”, she told the others, hoping she was totally wrong.

This post has been edited by *emerald dream*: 24 February 2007 - 07:00 AM

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Posted 24 February 2007 - 05:19 PM

Make me funnier! tongue.gif
Just kidding. Pretty sweet. You might want to make each piece of dialouge a new line. It makes it easier to read.







Wait, we DIE?!?!

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Posted 24 February 2007 - 11:20 PM

I thought Arthryn was the evil tyrannic dictator and I was the nice guy?

At least, that's what Arthryn and I agreed on...

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Posted 24 February 2007 - 11:23 PM

Haha seriously. I'm much more likely to have Matt assasinated and take power for myself and impose my fascist reign of darkness on this place and enslave everyone for my own entertainment. Hmm.. There might need to be some revision here.

But you have it right about the group of heroes dying in the end, because they could never defeat me. Or even get close.
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Posted 24 February 2007 - 11:27 PM

Haha, funny Arthryn. *coughscaryArthryncough*

Good job on the story and all, Em. Coo'. =)
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Posted 24 February 2007 - 11:48 PM

What are you talking about? I'm dead serious.
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Posted 24 February 2007 - 11:53 PM

Uh, yeah, whatever.

How am I cynical? o_O
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Posted 25 February 2007 - 12:32 AM

Wait...ed are you actually saying that i'm a deranged phycopath hiding in the woods to prey on kids that happen to past my bush?? tongue.gif

better put me in the story soon lol tongue.gif

btw , writing is fantastic, you need to untangle your plot and make the storyline clearer, cause i had to struggle to figure out what was happening...anyway, try including old bosco(or now know as broosco) tongue.gif

Oh and spitfires back, so include him too tongue.gif

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Posted 25 February 2007 - 04:14 AM

Actually, Arthryn, I was thinking of putting you as the evil tyrant of IF, but I changed my mind. You might get a position in the last chapters, who knows? Even dead tongue.gif
MSB, I will add you and Spiffy to the plot. Soon enough, eventually ...


CHAPTER TWO

Icean wore his X-ray shades. He had reached the tower's top spot successfully and unoticed. It was located in the main square, at the middle of Chit Chat section. There, IF citizens lived under the poorest conditions ever. Walking silently, careful not to be overheard, Icean noticed a door, at the floor's last corridor. He entered inside, while worrying his fast heartbeat would betray him.

Footsteps echoed through the dark corridor. It was Matthew's elite guard. Icean ran quickly and stuck his body behind the wall's closest column, holding his breath. A man's voice was heard. “Are you sure they escaped?”. Icean turned slightly left, trying to see who was talking. The tyrant was talking to EyesOnly and Aaron, who were looking quite embarrassed and scared of him. “Yes, my master. The girl slipped right off our hands”, EyesOnly confirmed. “So he's their master now ...”, Icean was lost in his thoughts.

Matthew walked angrily upside down the cold, metallic floor. “Then I'll have to act differently”, he responded and sighed. “Since Arthryn's death, people always prepare revolutions, which will be destructive enough to take my power down”. Aaron shook his head, showing his agreement. “The only thing we've learnt so far is that those filthy rebel's hideout is somewhere in the Tunnels Section. Nothing else. They know how to fight bravely, even if we have more allies”, the man referred. Icean, listening to their conversation, was ready to attack them. “Useless”, he thought.

Suddenly, Matthew turned around, like he noticed something unusual. Icean's heart stopped beating. The dictactor looked at where Icean was hiding for a second, and then continued talking to Aaron and EyesOnly, like nothing happened. “Let's go”, EyesOnly suggested and opened the door for Matthew to pass. Icean heard their footsteps' sound vanishing.

He stood up, carefully again and activated his shade's x-laser scan. Unfortunately, Matthew's office was tightly locked. Every minute was precious. He decided to risk his time. With a strong willing, Icean ran to the door and took out a magical pocketknife, which ED gave him as a gift. He put his left foot at the edge, while he started cutting the lock as fast as he could. And then, something heavy and spiky hit the back of his head. He collapsed on the floor, half afaint. The last thing he saw was Matthew, laughing evily over his failed attempt ...

This post has been edited by *emerald dream*: 25 February 2007 - 05:49 AM

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Posted 26 February 2007 - 12:03 PM

Ouch. That sounded like it hurt . . .
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Posted 26 February 2007 - 12:34 PM

Matthew laughing evilly while holding a spiked thingy is scary. :'(

Um. It's good.

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Posted 26 February 2007 - 12:42 PM

Hot dang. I didn't think Matthew hated me THAT much.

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Posted 27 February 2007 - 09:02 AM

wow one of ur best emerald

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Posted 27 February 2007 - 10:07 AM

Nice story. Where am I? xD

If you decide to put me in the story, don't make my name TheSickness unless it would really work. Like if I was some plague coming to kill people xD
Morzan or DarkMaster (DM) is fine. (But the plague thing doesn't seem so bad either aha)

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Posted 27 February 2007 - 12:51 PM

Thanks, everyone. Wow, I miss my old stories' /attempts/ correction tongue.gif

Sure, I'll put you in, TS. Your role is a surprise smilewink.gif

Next chapty will come soonish =D

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