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Duty The Sequel to Aiedail Shadeslayer. ^-^ C-4 Yes, I'm back. Rate Topic: ****- 4 Votes

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Posted 29 June 2007 - 12:51 PM

Chapter 1: The Shadeslayers

Brom slowly lifted the branch, glanced around, then sighed. Good, Eldrey wasn’t there. He was about to stand up when……

“Gotcha!!!!” Eldrey leapt down from the tree behind Brom and tackled him. The twins rolled around in the foliage, yelling and pounding each other. Finally, out of breath them stopped and collapsed on the ground, laughing.

“That was a good one, little brother,” Brom said. “I really never expected you to come up behind me like that.”

Eldrey grinned. “Thank you. I thought you had heard me for a moment.”

“Nope. I didn’t hear a thing.” They lay there, listening to the forest. Then Brom stood up.

“Come on, we need to get home.” He offered a hand to his brother, who grasped it and stood up.

Eragon Brom or Brom as he was called to avoid confusion with his grandfather, the famous Rider Eragon Shadeslayer, and Eldrey were as different as night and day. Both were tall and lean, well muscled from hours spent training with their parents, both of whom where Riders. Brom had light brown hair and sparkling, deep brown eyes. His ears were slightly pointed, barely noticeable. He wore his hair rather long, giving him an air of rebellion. His features were those of a human, soft and refined, not sharp and cattish.

Eldrey, the younger of the twins, was a blond hair, blue eyed ladies man. He cut his hair short, hating the slight curls it had when it grew out. His features were those of an elf, catlike and sculpted. His ears were as pointed as any elf, something his brother teased him about greatly.

The twins were twenty-five, loud and rambunctious like any young adult. At that point in time, their greatest wish was to become Riders, like their parents and grandfather. Brom was more interested in the fighting and magic side of the deal, while Eldrey wanted to help keep the peace and stuff like that. But, at the moment, they were focused on getting home, getting something to eat, and hopefully, getting a chance to annoy their younger sister, Hadassah.

The moment the boys entered Tialdarí Hall, they knew something was wrong. The elves were scuttling around, talking in whispers and glancing nervously at them.

“What do you think is going on?” Eldrey whispered. Brom shrugged. He was about to answer when a voice stopped them.

“You boys have a lot of explaining to do.” They whipped around to find their mother standing behind them.

Aiedail Shadeslayer was dressed in a loose, flowing tunic that allowed plenty of room for her to yank her sword out of its sheath at a moment’s notice. Her dark eye brows met in a frown and she crossed her arms. The scar that ran down her face, a memento from the fight that had earned her name, Shadeslayer, added to her displeased demeanor.

Eldrey scooted around his brother at the sight of Aiedail. “Hello mother,” he said, trying to sound innocent. Brom jabbed him in the gut. “Damn you, Brom,” he muttered.

“Eragon Brom and Eldrey Mor’ranr, I don’t want to hear your excuses, I want the truth from you. What did you do to Hadassah’s room?”

Brom hid a smirk. So, Hadassah had found the little present they had left her. Serve her right, the stuck up little brat.

“Well, nothing really. We just left her a present.” He said with his best innocent look. That one often got himself and Eldrey out of trouble.

Not today though.

“A present of a leather jacket decorated with red bird feathers!!?? Boys, what have I told you about…”

“…about respecting life and not mocking the dead. We know Mother.” Brom rolled his eyes. “We just had to do something. Hadassah was being a little tick, so I got mad and left that for her. Sorry.”

“I sincerely hope you have something more than that weak apology to offer your sister. Otherwise, I believe your father might have a word with you. Now, march!” They sighed, but obeyed, heading toward their rooms.

They stopped in front of Hadassah’s room. Brom knocked on the door.

“Who is it?” a weepy voice called out. He rolled his eyes.

“It’s Guliä. Who do you think it is, Dassah?” He grunted from the jab Eldrey sent to his gut.

“It’s us, Sassie. Let us in.” Eldrey called.

The door cracked open. Hadassah poked her head out.

Except for the scar, Hadassah was the replica of her mother. Soft brown curls cascaded down her back and large brown eyes, just like Brom’s, glared at them.

“Go away. I don’t want to talk to you.”

“Sassie, they came to apologize. Let them in.” Her mother said. Sassie sighed.

“Alright. But if they start being rude, out they go!!” The boys reluctantly nodded their agreement. She swung the door open.

They entered her rooms, which were alive with plants. They covered all the tables and chairs, some places you could barely move with out stepping on a plant. Eldrey nodded to a particular flower, a pale blue rose.

“How is it growing?” his sister smiled.

“Very well. Are you still not going to tell me where you got it?”

“Nope.” She sighed.

“Alright, you didn’t come here to talk about my plants. How about you start with that apology? And I expect it to be a good one.” She looked pointedly at Brom.

It wasn’t that they didn’t love their sister, it was just she was a major pest sometimes. Brom knew he would die for her, and he knew she knew it. But, sometimes, the urge to annoy her back was too great.

“I am very sorry for upsetting you, Dassah. I know I shouldn’t have done it, and beg your forgiveness.” Brom said in the ancient language. She nodded.

Eldrey repeated the apology, adding that he wouldn’t so it again. When that had finished, she smiled.

“You are forgiven. Now, did you hear the news?”

Aiedail smiled, knowing her children would not start fighting again, and left them to talk.

“What news?” Brom questioned. He looked around for a place to sit then settled for the floor. It was better not to try to move any of the plants; you never knew what one might do to you.

“Grandfather is coming back to Ellesméra and he is bringing the eggs!!”

“What?” Eldrey shot up from his sprawl on the floor. “When?”

“They should be here tomorrow. The news came while you were gone.” A dreamy look entered her eyes. “Maybe Nroca will be with them.” Her brothers exchanged glances.

“If he is, he had better watch out.” Brom muttered under his breath. Sassie shot him a glare.

“What is that supposed to mean?”

“Nothing. But if nut-boy wants to get to know you, he’ll have to go through us first.”

Sassie’s eyes opened wide then she giggled. “Nice try. Nut-boy indeed. I’ll have you know that Nroca is…”

“Dassah, his name is acorn spelled backwards. How much nuttier can you get?”

His sister snorted. “Look who is talking. If I remember correctly, you still have a certain wooden dragon that you named, oh what was it….”

“Woody.” Eldrey coughed. His brother glared daggers at him.

“Well, it is not as bad a Rider whose name is acorn backwards.” Hadassah’s lips twitched, then she burst into laughter.

“Wha…what would I do without you boys?” she said when she could breath again. “Really, if it was up to you, I wouldn’t be allowed to even look at a boy until I was a hundred!!”

The twins smirked. “That’s right. You may be annoying, but you are still our sister, and I swore to protect you after that stupid human almost killed you.” Brom reminded her.

“Yay, yay, yay. Go on, I have things to do. See you guys tonight.” She shooed them out the door, then locked it behind her. Brom glanced at Eldrey.

“Last one to the Hold has to clean out both horses’ stalls," he said, issuing a familiar challenge. Eldrey grinned.

“You’re on.” They took off for the Dragonhold, running for all they were worth.

This post has been edited by Aiedail Shadeslayer: 19 November 2009 - 04:58 PM

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Posted 29 June 2007 - 04:08 PM

Yay, it's up! I still love Brom's character. He's awesome. He's my favorite.

Lovely story, just lovely! Oh, I have a question: Is Gaidan going to be in this? Because I really hope so. Gaidan's almost as cool as Brom.

Update soon!

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Posted 29 June 2007 - 04:32 PM

I like it but I find it wierd that 25 yr old boys would still report to their mother. But I can understand I suppose because Elves live longer. How old is Dassah?
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Posted 30 June 2007 - 11:23 AM

Yeah, I like the chapter, but aren't they a bit old for that? Remember, they are only part elf. Caleb was half elf and Aiedail is half elf while the other half is human. But I like how the story starts.
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Posted 30 June 2007 - 03:55 PM

LOL, actually, when I first wrote this chapter, Brom and Eldrey were 16. But that wasn't working so good for me, so I changed it. ^-^
And Dassah is about 20 or 21, I THINK. I have to go over my notes.
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Posted 30 June 2007 - 08:49 PM

So Hadassah likes Nroca... I like how Brom and Eldery overreacted.
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Posted 01 July 2007 - 03:59 PM

LOL, it was the funnest part to write. HEY, HEY. HEY, I am going to post the Caleb story soon. biggrin.gif
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Posted 01 July 2007 - 04:53 PM

I would MUCH rather you updated this one.

But you still haven't answered my question: will Gaidan be in this story?

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Posted 02 July 2007 - 01:34 PM

Ok, ok, update. And then I will post the other, happy?
And I don't know if Gaidan will be in this story. If you really want it, I will put it in.





Chapter 2: Eggs

The next day, Brom and Eldrey waited impatiently for their grandfather to arrive. Sassie was seated at the base of the Menoa tree, waiting with them.

“What if one of us was to become a Rider?” she asked her brothers. Brom shrugged.

“I bet it would be Eldrey. He is the one who has all the qualifications.”

“No, I think Sassie will have an egg hatch for her.” Their sister blushed.

“No, it’ll be one of you. Both of you have the qualities that are required to be a Rider.”

“Dassah, if you were to become a Rider, what color would you want your dragon to be?”

“Hmmm, I haven’t really thought about it. I guess a blue dragon like Saphira would be cool.”

“I want to have a white dragon, like mother. White dragons are the most powerful. What about you, Eldrey?”

“Hmmm? Oh, umm I think a gold dragon would be awesome.”

Hadassah jumped up. “There they are!!! Oh, Father is with them!!!” She dashed from the clearing and ran to Tialdarí Hall. The twins ran after her.

When they reached the courtyard of Tialdarí Hall, Saphira had already landed and was moving out of the way for a giant, silver dragon, Vanilor, to land. Fricai, Aiedail’s white dragon, started to hum as soon as her mate landed. Caleb jumped down from Vanilor’s back and grabbed Aiedail, swinging her around, then kissed her. Brom and Eldrey pretended to gag.

“Father, guess what plant I finally got to bloom!!” Sassie ran to her father and threw her arms around him.

“Hello sweetheart. Which one this time?”

“The rose Eldrey gave me!!! It smells wonderful.”

“I can’t wait to see it. Hello boys.”

“Hello Father. Did you rescue anyone this time?” Brom asked. Eldrey nodded.

“Nope. Just worked on that treaty with the Urgals. Oh, Sassie, I have something for you. One of the younger Riders asked me to give it to you.” He handed her a package. Sassie’s eyes sparkled.

“See you guys later!!” she took off for her rooms.

“Who was that from?” Brom questioned.

“That is for me to know and you to not. Now, we should get inside. Eragon wants to have the ceremony tonight.”

They left the courtyard, exchanging stories and laughing as they went.

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That night, Brom shifted from foot to foot impatiently. Today was the first time he was allowed to touch the eggs. He really hoped one of them would hatch for him. Beside him, his brother shift anxiously as well.

Finally, Eragon gave the signal and the first elf stepped forward. Brom and Eldrey’s friends had tried to convince them to go to the front, but they refused. Instead, they were in the middle.

Eventually, it was Brom’s turn. Two dragons had hatched, a dark green female for an elf called Feron, and a scarlet for Brom’s best friend, Aurora.

He took a deep breath and stepped forward. The first egg he picked up, a soft yellow, didn’t hatch. He moved down the line, his heart sinking lower when, egg after egg, he was rejected.

Finally, he paused before the last egg. It was a shimmering white color that reminded him of an opal. Did he dare touch it? If he was rejected, that would be the end of his dreams to be a Rider.

Finally, he reached out and placed a hand on the egg.

Instantly, he felt a consciousness touch his and a squeak split the air. He knew what that meant. Carefully, he picked the egg up and cradled it in his arms. The squeaks grew louder and soon a crack appeared in the shell. Carefully, Brom helped the hatchling get out of its shell.

When the last piece of shell fell away, Brom got his first good look at his dragon. Its scales looked like they were made from opals, shimmering and dancing with a million colors. Warm, emerald eyes gazed into his, curiosity gleaming in them. Cautiously, he reached out a hand and touched the hatchling.

Instantly, pain, pure, mind numbing, sense-crushing pain assaulted him, making him want to cry out. He retreated into his mind to escape it.

Eventually, the feeling came back to his limbs and a thread of thought brushed his mind. Curiosity rolled off it in waves.

Brom opened his eyes and found himself staring into a pair of sparkling, emerald eyes. He looked at his right hand. A diffused white oval was forming. The gedwëy ignasia. His gedwëy ignasia.

Suddenly, he was aware of where he was. Elves were crowded around him, staring in wonder at the hatchling. Eldrey was beside him, trying to talk to him.

“What?” Brom finally managed

“Hello, earth to Brom!! Congratulations. Now, get out of the way so I can go.”

“Oh, sorry.” He gathered his hatchling in his arms and walked to stand with Aurora and Feron. Aurora smiled at him.

“Brom, look, we’re Riders!!” She waved her gedwëy ignasia in his face.

“I know.” He ran a hand over his dragon’s scales. The thread in his mind turned to raving hunger. He winced.

“What’s wrong?” Aurora asked.

“It’s hungry.”

She giggled. “So was mine. There is some meat right there.” She pointed to a small table pilled with meat. Brom grimaced, then picked some up and feed it to his dragon.

Brom pulled back to the present just in time to see Eldrey out the last egg down. A pang of sympathy raced through him for his twin.

Eldrey approached them, his face sad.

“Hey,” he mumbled.

“Hey,” Brom answered. He watched Eldrey run a hand over the opal hatchling’s scales. He didn’t know what to say. Eldrey was the one who always knew what to say. Brom knew if he said something like, I’m sorry, his twin would never forgive him.

“Rey….”

“No, don’t. Besides,” Eldrey forced a smile. “I can always go to Doru Araeba. Maybe one of the eggs there will hatch for me.”

“Yeah.” They stood in silence, watching the other young elves touch the eggs. Two more eggs hatched, the yellow and a pale gray blue. Both elves were girls, something that rankled Brom. Aurora was his best friend, after his brother of course, and he was glad she had become a Rider, but because of the two new dragons, the class would be three girls and two boys.

Damn it. He thought.

The hatchling looked up at him, a question resonding in his mind.

Nothing.

Brom.
The single word startled him. He gazed at the hatchling.

Was that you? He asked it.

Brom.
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Posted 02 July 2007 - 03:38 PM

I like it, but I dont think hatchlings are supposed to start speaking that early. Or maybe it wasn't the Dragon? Poor Eldrey. But it's nice odds for Brom to find a girlfriend...haha. I am having trouble picturing them as older men though. They just seem so young to me.

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Posted 02 July 2007 - 06:24 PM

The dragonis a very special dragon!! No dissing her!!!
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Posted 02 July 2007 - 08:11 PM

Cute chapter. Eldrey got rejected....oh well. It was a good chapter neverless.

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Posted 02 July 2007 - 08:14 PM

I find it very, um, convienant that Brom got exactly the color he wanted. But it's nothing major.

Yea, I'm also finding it hard to picture them as 25-year olds. They seem more like 15-16.

Yes, I would very muchly like for Gaidan to be in it. It would be cool if he was really old, and couldn't get around very well. Then we could have a sad scene where he died.

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Posted 03 July 2007 - 11:14 AM

Actaully, The dragon is opal scaled, not white. There is a differance, believe me. It is like saying a pearl is the same thing as an Opal. ^-^
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Posted 03 July 2007 - 01:28 PM

Oh, okay. So, is it white Opal, black Opal, or what?

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