[Pearl Phoenix]

Warning you guys, these are angsty and romantic. Like my siggy. I'll put all my poems here.

When I close my eyes
I see him

I feel his arms around me
And I feel his lips on mine

But then I realize
It was all just a dream

That's when I remember
It was all a lie

[Darth Futuza]

Its ok...but it needs a lot more, add...and I'll be able to rate it, it dosen't have enough lines...

But thats a good start.

[Pearl Phoenix]

Its ok...but it needs a lot more, add...and I'll be able to rate it, it dosen't have enough lines...

But thats a good start.

I like short poems. Long ones are evil to me. I just don't know why.

[Darth Futuza]

Lol...Its good though, I like long poems...

[Pearl Phoenix]

I wrote another poem. I hope it's good. Took five minutes, so It's probably bad.

You said you’d always love me
And I’d always believe you

But then after you went away
I lost faith

My dreams said you would come back
And I never believed

I never thought
They would be true

I didn’t ask for much
I just wanted to die

But a voice in my head
Said I couldn’t do that to you

So I denied the truth
And stayed alive

But when I realized
I couldn’t keep lying

I just let go
Before you could return

[witch168]

I liked the first one better than the second one, because it told a story.
The second one is a little confusing, because i'm getting mixed emotions from reading it.

My dreams said you would come back
And I never believed
I never thought
They would be true

This can be just one stanza, because it's one sentence or complete thought. Same with:

But when I realized
I couldn’t keep lying
I just let go
Before you could return

One stanza. Other than that, I really wished you could keep on going after the last stanza, even though it didn't fit. i got the impression that the speaker was trying to say sorry for letting go. And if you modify the rest of the poem to that idea, I think it would look really great.

-The Witch