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A Naruto Fanfic C2 By me. Please read! Rate Topic: ***** 2 Votes

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Posted 24 December 2007 - 06:27 PM

Okay. This is a Naruto fanfic written by me. It takes place a few years later, when Naruto and the gang are older, and their children and grandchildren are the ones taking missions and exams now. Please note that I personally will take the Leaf and Sand Villages. I sort of have a preferance towards Hikari, so you'll be reading pretty much alot about her. Enjoy!

Chapter 1

The Village Hidden in the Leaves, as always, was running busily. People out in the streets with their stands selling their merchandise . Girls and boys ran, playing around. Some of the bigger kids headed off to Ninja Academy. The grownups walked calmly towards their work as ninja.

Inside the Academy, students of ages under twelve were practicing for their exam to become Genin, the first stage as ninja.

“Very well class” said their sensei, Rock Lee sensei, “Today we will practice or transformation jutsus for the exam tomorrow. Remember, you have to all do your best to become the top Genin here in the Village, like I once was…” He sighed deeply.

“Anyway, may all of you follow me into the next room to start practicing?”

The students stood up and followed him to the next room, where their examination will be held the next day.

“Okay, first up is Hikari Hyuga” said the sensei. A girl of about twelve moved up to the front of the class. She had waist long, black hair and silver colored eyes. She wore a beige colored dress, long in the back and short in the front, with black pants underneath it.

“Transform!” said Hikari, making the hand signs for the jutsu. She instantly turned into an exact replica of Rock Lee sensei. A few seconds later she turned back to herself.

“Very good. Next is Inomara Yamanaka” A girl with bright blonde hair pulled up in a ponytail that went down a little more than her waistline came up. She wore a brown top, with black Capri pants. She had green eyes.

“Transform!” The same as Hikari, she turned into an exact replica of their sensei. A few seconds later, she looked like herself again.

“Good. Next is Nutiket Uchiha” A boy with brown hair spiked up, eyes as black as the night. He wore a dark blue loose jacket that hangs a little below the waist with the Uchiha symbol on the collar. He also wore a similar made pants under the jacket.

“Transform!”

“Very good, Nutiket.”

“Just what you’d expect from him” said Hikari, beaming at Nutiket.

“Yeah, do you even think you have a chance with him? I mean, we have to be realistic, you don’t even come close with me around” said Inomara.

“Believe whatever you want, Inomara, but I know what I know. And what I know is that me and Nutiket are destined to be together”

“Humph, whatever, weirdo”

Nutiket came over to them and Hikari left a space for him next to her, away from Inomara.

“That was great, Nutiket!” she said.

“Thanks. You weren’t that bad either, Hikari” said Nutiket.

See Inomara, I do have a chace with him Hikari thought.

Like that, all of the students passed by, all of them transforming successfully. Finally, only one was left.

“Nodare Uzumaki” A boy with a wide grin on his face walked up to the front of the class. He had black hair, that was spiked up ony a little due to it’s length. His eyes were blue with a little bit of silver mixed into them. He wore beige and black top shirt and black pants.

“Right here, Rock Lee sensei!” He preformed a hand sign. “Transform!” A puff of smoke appeared, and when it cleared away, a girl covered with clouds everywhere was standing there. She winked at the teacher.

The girls in the crowd looked and started to giggle at their classmate, while the boys stood there looking at Nodare, with their mouths open. The teacher stood there, with his mouth open, red patches opearing at his cheeks.

“Nodare, that is- it’s-” Rock Lee sensei could not finish his sentence.

Nodare turned back to himself. “That’s the sexy jutsu! Straight from the teachings or our much respected Lord Hokage!” He said.

“Yeah right! Keep dreaming Nodare, Lord Hokage would never do something like that!” said Hikari.

“But it’s true! Honest! You should know, Hikari, you were learning with me when Lord Hokage took me away. Lady Hinata took you apart too, so you could master your Byakugan better.”

Hikari blushed and looked away from Nutiket.

“You were training with this weirdo?” he asked her.

She nodded and turned to look at her sensei again.

“Umm… Nodare! If you keep this up, you’ll never reach the Chunnin level. How do you expect to be a good patrol leader, if you can’t even master a good and simple transformation jutsu?” said Rock Lee sensei.

“Just because I can’t master that kind of transformation doesn’t mean I don’t master transforming! Didn’t you just see me transform into a girl with that sexy Jutsu?” said Nodare, outraged.

“That is true, Nodare. You remind me a lot of Naruto, when he was your age. Just as stubborn, hardheaded and annoying as him” said Rock Lee sensei, grinning.

“Grrr. It’s not funny!” said Nodare, walking away from the middle of the students.

“Um. Okay, that seems to be everyone. Tomorrow will be the actual exam. Lord Hokage shall be present, to make sure himself that all of you passed” he said the last looking at Nodare “This is a serious exam, not just to see who gets or doesn’t get to be a Genin level ninja. This exam will prove how us senseis are working on the education system, and to see who here is worthy enough to represent or village in battle, in the case that it will be necessary someday.” Finished Rock Lee sensei. He nodded “Now you may all leave, you are dismissed until tomorrow. Don’t be late for the exam, because it will not look good on your record, a ninja being late”

He did a hand sign and disappeared in puff of smoke.

“Pft, showoff” said Nodare, opening the classroom door. He walked outside, the rest of the students following him. Hikari went outside and stoped at the door.

“Umm, Nutiket, do you want to go eat something with me now? Ramen or something?” she said, as Nutiket came out of the classroom.

“Sure-”

“I’d love to go too, Hikari!” came Nodare’s voice.

“Nodare, I wish to go with Nutiket, not with you along.”

“Yeah, go try to win over some other girl, if you can” said Nutiket.

Hikari and Nutiket walked away, leaving Nodare standing there all alone.

“Being the seventh Hokage’s grandson has really gone to his head. Though nobody calls him honorable grandson, like they called Konahamaru.” said Hikari.

“Maybe because he isn’t honorable enough.” said Nutiket jokingly.
“Probably” said Hikari laughing.

They reached the Ichiraku’s Ramen Shop, and ringed the little bell.

“Come in” came a voice from inside.

They pulled the curtains aside and sat down.

“One bowl with fried pork, please” said Nutiket.

“Make that two”

“How ’bout three?” came a very familiar voice from outside.

“Oh no” said Hikari. She looked back to see Inomara, standing there with a grin.

“What a surprise to find you two here” she said in a tone of faked surprise.

“Come off it, Ino, you knew we were coming” said Hikari madly.

“Maybe I did, maybe I didn’t” Inomara said, pusing herself between Nutiket and Hikari, turning her back on Hikari.

“So, Nutiket. Nervous about the exam?”

“No.”

“I mean, you have to be at least a little nervous. What if you fail?”

“I know I wont fail, because I’m confident that I can do everything Rock Lee sensei taught us”

“Well, I’m a little nervous. What if I forget a tecnique or something?”

“You’ll take the exam next year, idiot” said Hikari, standing up.

“Stay out of this, Hyuuga girl. Nutiket and I are talking. Right, Nutiket?” she turned to look at Nutiket, but found that he had gone.

“WHY THAT LITTLE- I mean, he must have had things to do, that little cutie” said Inomara, a vein throbbing in her temple. She had calmed down a little, but was still breathing heavily.

“Yeah right” Hikari left Ichiraku’s Ramen Shop. On the street she looked both waysmand saw Nutiket walking in the direction of his house.

“I’ll let him go” she said to herself, and started walking in drection of her own.

“Oh man, what a drag” came a voice from behind her. She turned and looked at Shikaku, a boring looking kid. He had a face of being bothered by everything and anything.

“What’s up, Shikaku?”

“My dad wants me to go run some errands for him. That is such a drag” he said.

“Good luck with that” said Hikari, running off.

Shikaku waved her off and turned to walk towards the center of town. He went into the weapons shop, and bought the kunai knives his father had made him buy. When he walked outside, he saw Nutiket buying some tea at the tea shop. Shikaku walked over to him and pated him on the back. Nutiket jumped and looked back, sighing at seeing Shikaku.

“You scared me, for a moment there I thought you were Inomara. She’s been following me aroud town all day. Won’t even let me eat in peace.” he said.

“Yeah, scary girl that one. I just hope I end up with Kara or Hikari on my squad, but not her” said Shikaku, walking away.

I hope I don’t get stuck with her either. Thought Nutiket.

*******
Okay, this is the end of that chapter. Hope you guys like it!
Merry Christmas!

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Posted 25 December 2007 - 05:56 PM

Haha I lvoe it
thats awesome
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Posted 25 December 2007 - 07:31 PM

Hey, I like it a lottttttttttttttttttt, ill post the sand village part soon, is just i havent had much time lately, but its coming soon,

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Posted 25 December 2007 - 08:45 PM

you need to post more, forget that its Christmas, I want more!
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Posted 25 December 2007 - 08:54 PM

Hey EA we should get more because it's Chrismas.

Really thought, it very entertaining Becky.

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Posted 25 December 2007 - 09:50 PM

Hehe, been awhile since I've critted anything here, guess you're my victem, guys. biggrin.gif I promise to go light on you.

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QUOTE(tkd_becky @ Dec 24 2007, 07:27 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Chapter 1

The Village Hidden in the Leaves, as always, was running busily. People out in the streets with their stands selling their merchandise (this was a fragment, you were missing a verb). Girls and boys ran, playing around. Some of the bigger kids headed off to Ninja Academy. The grownups (you might want to use the word adults here, that would be more of a personal preference, though) walked calmly towards their work as ninja.

Inside the Academy, students of ages under twelve were practicing for their exam to become Genin (worded kind of strangely. Could use a bit of revampment there), the first stage as ninja.

“Very well, class” said their sensei, Rock Lee sensei(thats a bit repetative, you said sensei twice. I do, however, love that Rock Lee(t) is a sensei. smile.gif), “Today we will practice or transformation jutsus for the exam tomorrow. Remember, you have to all do your best to become the top Genin here in the Village, like I once was…” He sighed deeply.

“Anyway, may all of you follow me into the next room to start practicing?”

The students stood up and followed him to the next room, where their examination will(once more, this is just a personal thing, but the word would most likely would be better here) be held the next day.

“Okay, first up is Hikari Hyuga” said the sensei. A girl of about twelve moved up to the front of the class. She had waist long, black hair and silver colored eyes. She wore a beige colored dress, long in the back and short in the front, with black pants underneath it.

“Transform!” said Hikari, making the hand signs for the jutsu. She instantly turned into an exact replica of Rock Lee sensei. A few seconds later she turned back to herself.

“Very good. Next is Inomara Yamanaka” A girl with bright blonde hair pulled up in a ponytail that went down a little more than her waistline came up. She wore a brown top, with black Capri pants. She had green eyes.

“Transform!” The same as Hikari, she turned into an exact replica of their sensei. A few seconds later, she looked like herself again.

“Good. Next is Nutiket Uchiha” A boy with brown hair spiked up, eyes as black as the night. He wore a dark blue loose jacket that hangs a little below the waist with the Uchiha symbol on the collar. He also wore a similar made pants under the jacket.

“Transform!”

“Very good, Nutiket.”

“Just what you’d expect from him” said Hikari, beaming at Nutiket.

“Yeah, do you even think you have a chance with him? I mean, we have to be realistic, you don’t even come close with me around” said Inomara.

“Believe whatever you want, Inomara, but I know what I know. And what I know is that me and Nutiket are destined to be together”

“Humph, whatever, weirdo”

Nutiket came over to them and Hikari left a space for him next to her, away from Inomara.

“That was great, Nutiket!” she said.

“Thanks. You weren’t that bad either, Hikari” said Nutiket.

See Inomara, I do have a chace with him(you might want to do something with thoughts, such as italics or something like that. Completely up to you guys, though) Hikari thought.

Like that, all of the students passed by, all of them transforming successfully. Finally, only one was left.

“Nodare Uzumaki” A boy with a wide grin on his face walked up to the front of the class. He had black hair(I bet I can guess who the mother is. smile.gif ), that was spiked up ony a little due to it’s length. His eyes were blue with a little bit of silver mixed into them. He wore beige and black top shirt and black pants.

“Right here, Rock Lee sensei!” He preformed a hand sign. “Transform!” A puff of smoke appeared, and when it cleared away, a girl covered with clouds everywhere was standing there. She winked at the teacher.

The girls in the crowd looked and started to giggle at their classmate, while the boys stood there looking at Nodare, with their mouths open. The teacher stood there, with his mouth open, red patches opearing at his cheeks.

“Nodare, that is- it’s-” Rock Lee sensei could not finish his sentence.

Nodare turned back to himself. “That’s the sexy jutsu! Straight from the teachings or our much respected Lord Hokage(guess Naruto's dream came true. tongue.gif )!” He said.

“Yeah right! Keep dreaming Nodare, Lord Hokage would never do something like that!” said Hikari.

“But it’s true! Honest! You should know, Hikari, you were learning with me when Lord Hokage took me away. Lady Hinata took you apart too, so you could master your Byakugan better.”

Hikari blushed and looked away from Nutiket.

“You were training with this weirdo?” he asked her.

She nodded and turned to look at her sensei again.

“Umm… Nodare! If you keep this up, you’ll never reach the Chunnin level. How do you expect to be a good patrol leader, if you can’t even master a good and simple transformation jutsu?” said Rock Lee sensei.

“Just because I can’t master that kind of transformation doesn’t mean I don’t master transforming! Didn’t you just see me transform into a girl with that sexy Jutsu?” said Nodare, outraged.

“That is true, Nodare. You remind me a lot of Naruto, when he was your age. Just as stubborn, hardheaded and annoying as him” said Rock Lee sensei, grinning.

“Grrr. It’s not funny!” said Nodare, walking away from the middle of the students.

“Um. Okay, that seems to be everyone. Tomorrow will be the actual exam. Lord Hokage shall be present, to make sure himself that all of you passed” he said the last looking at Nodare “This is a serious exam, not just to see who gets or doesn’t get to be a Genin level ninja. This exam will prove how us senseis are working on the education system, and to see who here is worthy enough to represent or village in battle, in the case that it will be necessary someday.” Finished Rock Lee sensei. He nodded. “Now you may all leave, you are dismissed until tomorrow. Don’t be late for the exam, because it will not look good on your record, a ninja being late”

He did a hand sign and disappeared in puff of smoke.

“Pft, showoff” said Nodare, opening the classroom door. He walked outside, the rest of the students following him. Hikari went outside and stoped at the door.

“Umm, Nutiket, do you want to go eat something with me now? Ramen or something?” she said, as Nutiket came out of the classroom.

“Sure-”

“I’d love to go too, Hikari!” came Nodare’s voice.

“Nodare, I wish to go with Nutiket, not with you along.”

“Yeah, go try to win over some other girl, if you can” said Nutiket.

Hikari and Nutiket walked away, leaving Nodare standing there all alone.

“Being the seventh Hokage’s grandson has really gone to his head. Though nobody calls him honorable grandson, like they called Konahamaru.” said Hikari.

“Maybe because he isn’t honorable enough.” said Nutiket jokingly.

“Probably” said Hikari laughing.

They reached the Ichiraku’s Ramen Shop, and ringed the little bell.

“Come in” came a voice from inside.

They pulled the curtains aside and sat down.

“One bowl with fried pork, please” said Nutiket.

“Make that two”

“How ’bout three?” came a very familiar voice from outside.

“Oh no” said Hikari. She looked back to see Inomara, standing there with a grin.

“What a surprise to find you two here” she said in a tone of faked surprise.

“Come off it, Ino, you knew we were coming” said Hikari madly.

“Maybe I did, maybe I didn’t” Inomara said, pushing herself between Nutiket and Hikari, turning her back on Hikari.

“So, Nutiket. Nervous about the exam?”

“No.”

“I mean, you have to be at least a little nervous. What if you fail?”

“I know I wont fail, because I’m confident that I can do everything Rock Lee sensei taught us”

“Well, I’m a little nervous. What if I forget a tecnique or something?”

“You’ll take the exam next year, idiot” said Hikari, standing up.
(bit of empty dialogue there, you could have used a bit more actions, such as telling what their faces looked like or hand movements or something.)

“Stay out of this, Hyuuga girl. Nutiket and I are talking. Right, Nutiket?” she turned to look at Nutiket, but found that he had gone.

“WHY THAT LITTLE- I mean, he must have had things to do, that little cutie” said Inomara, a vein throbbing in her temple. She had calmed down a little, but was still breathing heavily.

“Yeah, right” Hikari left Ichiraku’s Ramen Shop. On the street she looked both ways and saw Nutiket walking in the direction of his house.

“I’ll let him go” she said to herself, and started walking in drection of her own.

“Oh man, what a drag” came a voice from behind her. She turned and looked at Shikaku, a boring looking kid. He had a face of being bothered by everything and anything.

“What’s up, Shikaku?”

“My dad wants me to go run some errands for him. That is such a drag” he said.

“Good luck with that” said Hikari, running off.

Shikaku waved her off and turned to walk towards the center of town. He went into the weapons shop, and bought the kunai knives his father had made him buy. When he walked outside, he saw Nutiket buying some tea at the tea shop. Shikaku walked over to him and pated him on the back. Nutiket jumped and looked back, sighing at seeing Shikaku.

“You scared me, for a moment there I thought you were Inomara. She’s been following me aroud town all day. Won’t even let me eat in peace.” he said.

“Yeah, scary girl that one. I just hope I end up with Kara or Hikari on my squad, but not her” said Shikaku, walking away.

I hope I don’t get stuck with her either. Thought Nutiket.

*******
Okay, this is the end of that chapter. Hope you guys like it!
Merry Christmas!


Other comments: I like it so far, most of the characters act like who I expect their parents are. However, that kind of eleminates some important character development there. I'll be sure to come see what happens to this, and make sure to crit it as well.

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Posted 26 December 2007 - 12:58 PM

I love it!! Can you do me a favor though?

OK, Hikari is Hinata's kid? With who?

Shikaku - Shikamaru tongue.gif Maybe with Tamari

Nutiket - Uchiha, that pretty much says it all. Sakura?

Can you post the parents of the kids, please?

And, I totaly agree! I love Hikari! Especially as her name means 'lght' and she's my favorite Digidestined, to top it off.

Great work!!!!!

PS: I'm absolutely, 100% sure, positive, that the Huuga eyes are light purple. Care to provide images? I'll do the same.

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Posted 26 December 2007 - 03:05 PM

Umm. I didn't know that Hikari was a digidestined, maybe because I haven't seen Digimon in a looong time... Okay the 'rents!
Neji+TenTen=Hikari and Hitomi
Sasuke+Sakura= Nutiket and Kichirou
Shikamaru+Temari=Shikaku
Ino+Choji=Inoki and Cho(twins) and Chorenn
Naruto+Hinata=Ichirou
Cho+Ichirou=Nodare
Rock Lee+Ren=Kenta and Akira
Akira+Kichirou=Kibuki
Kiba+Aimi=Kara
Shino+Yusuki=Masori
Inoki+Kenta=Inomara
And Kakashi got married and had Katsuo
Konahamaru also got married and had Sora
That's everyone, I think...
Now for part of chapter 2

"Lord Hyuuga" the man bowed deeply.

"What is it?" said Neji Hyuuga, opening his eyes. His meditation had been interrupted for the third time today. After this one he would stop trying to meditate.

"Lord Hokage wishes to see you. Something about the exams" said the messenger.

"Very well" said Neji, standing up and sighing. He walked over to the door and put his shoes on, then proceeded to walk to the Hokage's mansion, where Lord Hokage would be waiting for him. Once he reached there, a guard escorted him to the Hokage's main office. The guard knocked and the door opened, letting Neji walk inside.

"Lord Hyuuga" said the Hokage, looking up at his visitor.

"Lord Hokage" Neji dipped his head.

"No more Lord stuff, you can call me by my name" said the Hokage.

"It's been a long time, Naruto" said Neji. He looked to a corner, where his younger cousin, Hinata was sitting doing some paperwork. "Hinata" he said to her. Hinata looked up and gasped. "Neji" she said, in a low fragile voice.

"You wanted to see me, Naruto?"

"Yes. About the Chunnin exams. Are you planning on letting Hikari enter?" said Naruto.

"Isn't it a little early to think about the Chunnin exams?" said Neji.

"A little, but I have to know if the Hyuuga and Uchiha clans are in, so I may inform the Lords of the other countries."

"Yes, Hikari will compete. However, I don't assure you she will win. Although her Byakugan is the strongest I've ever seen, she doesn't master it fully. If she wishes to participate, she will."

"That's all I expected to hear from you, Neji. Now-"

"Lord Hokage" someone interrupted at the door. Naruto looked at the door, and saw a familiar face standing there.

"Lord Uchiha, I never thought you would come. What a surprise" said Naruto.

"I can't turn down an invitation from the Hokage" said Sasuke Uchiha, bowing his head.

"Good. Now, I would like to ask you. Is Nutiket participating in the exam?" said Naruto.

"Of course, sir."
******
To be continued... later.
One question: how in the world does Nutiket remind you of Sasuke? That all two girls like him??? His attitude is nothing like Sasuke's or Sakura's.
And Hikari acts like Sakura, just in the liking Nutiket part, but isn't Sakura's daughter.

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Posted 26 December 2007 - 03:29 PM

Yay and update. Thankyou
Short but good.
So if this is mostly the thrid generation will be more about their grandchildren?

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Posted 26 December 2007 - 03:34 PM

It's third and second, as you may see by the pairings. Hikari and Nutiket are second, while Inomara is third.

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Posted 26 December 2007 - 04:49 PM

Mmmkaay cool

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Posted 30 December 2007 - 03:49 PM

Okay, I'l write a short update off the top of my head. I'm at a realtive's house now, so I can't write much.


"So, that makes three of the rookies..." Naruto mutterer to himself.

"Excuse me?" said Neji.

"Are you already picking out the rookies?" said Sasuke slowly.

"Well, I'm asking for the most I'm looking forward to seeing in the competition" said Naruto defensevely.

"Excuse me, sir" came a voice in the door, and Naruto was relieved to see Sakura, Kiba, Shino, Ino, Rock Lee, Shikamaru and, Choji at the door.

"Such a long time! The whole gang's finally together again!" said Naruto in amusement, standing up to greet his newest visitors."This place has never been this packed before. It's a historic day!"

Hinata stood up to greet her old team mates. They hadn't seen eash other in over two years now, since Shino and Kiba had responsabilities as parents and had to go out on missions almost daily.

"Shino, Kiba. How nice to see you" said Hinata in her soft voice.

"Hinata! It's been too long!" said Kiba, embracing her in a tight hug.

"Hinata" said Shino, bowing his head a little.

A booming bark came from outside the door. Everyone stood silently looking at the door. Sudently, the door burst open and a a huge dog came running inside. The dog came over running at Hinata, and jumped on top of her, licking her face.

"Akamaru!" said Hinata, trying to get the huge Akamaru off her.

Ruff, ruff barked Akamaru, getting off Hinata. Everyone at the office started laughing. Hinata patted Akamaru on the head.

Rock Lee looked around. He spotted Neji and walked over to him.

"It has been a long time, Neji" said Rock Lee, bowing in respect to the Head of the Hyuuga clan, one of the most powerful ninja in the Hidden Leaf Village.

"True. So, I hear from Hikari you got yourself into teaching. Interesting, since you can't preform ninjutsu or genjutsu. How are the students supossed to lear those two basic ninja skills with a teacher that can't preform them himself?" said Neji, looking directly at Rock Lee.

"If you think that you are still better than me, I challenge you to a match" said Rock Lee, puffing up his chest "I bet I can beast you with only my taijutsu!"

"You couldn't beat me 36 years ago, you can't beat me now" said Neji, smiling "But I still accept your challenge. Shall we go outside?"

"We shall" Everyone turned to look at them as they walked out of the office.

"What was that all about? What the heck!" said Naruto, walking over to the door.

"Neji and Rock Lee are about about to fight outside" said Sakura, who was nearest them at the moment.

"No way! Not now!" said Naruto, running outside. Everyone else followed him outside.

Neji and Rock Lee were already standing on different ends of the terrain. The wind blowed, moving Neji's Rock Lee's hair.

"Don't do this guys! There is no need for this!" yelled Sakura from the spectators side.

"Shall we begin?" yelled Neji over the roar of the wind. Rock Lee nodded. For a second, they both stood there. Then Neji preformed a hand sign.

"Byakugan!" said Neji. All around his temples, veins appeared, activating the Byakugan. The pupil of his eye appeared, with little veins popping over the eyes.

Rock Lee ran forward, toward Neji.

"Leaf Hurricane!" Rock Lee gave a twirl in the air and was about to hit Neji round the head, when Neji caught his leg in mid jump. He gave spinned it and threw Rock Lee on the ground. Lee manged to land on his feet.

"See? You have no chance against me" sneered Neji, looking down at Lee.

"Don't count me out yet!"said Rock Lee.



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Posted 30 December 2007 - 04:02 PM

NIce, the fight of the oldies.... when they're old!!!!
This is very good, i started writing the sand Village Part but haven't had time to put it on the computer. Well se ya later and keep writting



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Posted 30 December 2007 - 04:10 PM

Cool! Looks like Naruto never did get Sakura to like him enough! thumbsup.gif
I don't think Naruto's grown all that much.
To think that they've hardly changed after so many years...

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Posted 30 December 2007 - 04:36 PM

QUOTE(Kazza @ Dec 30 2007, 04:10 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Cool! Looks like Naruto never did get Sakura to like him enough! thumbsup.gif
I don't think Naruto's grown all that much.
To think that they've hardly changed after so many years...



Hahah thats what i was thinking.
I keep picturing them all old and wrinkled, but still trying to fight each other.
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