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IF Rebellion (C0) My new (and probably not good) peace of C0 writing!! Rate Topic: ***** 3 Votes

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Posted 22 July 2008 - 06:27 PM

Yeh, this is my first time, so I don't expect it to be all that good.





IF Rebellion:

CuLDud was surfing the net on that fateful day of the 30th of May, 2007. He had just read Eragon and Eldest, and joined something called "Inheritance Forums" commonly known as "IF". He had seen the website URL on the inside of the cover of Eldest.

CuLDud had expected to have great fun on IF, but he was sadly mistaken. Once joined CuLDud felt a surge, and the lights flickered out. When they came back on, CuLDud found he was in another place, not his home at all. He was in IF.

IF was a world with many threads and sub-forums. And people commonly went missing, supposedly "banned". IF's definition of "banned", was being killed by being torn apart by a Dragon. It was a world like the one CuLDud had left behind, except much, much different. It seams that Inheritance Forums was a Medieval world, it had a few things that made it different from the Medieval world we know. An example being Dragons.

The evil ruler of IF was known as Arthryn, but nobody knows if it's her true name or not. After one year in this dark land, CuLDud fell in with a secretive group, that they called the "Liberators". There were often rebellions in IF, but this time, this time was different.

This is where our story starts, in the IF Rebellion.



Chapter 1

CuLDud strolled casually to the Boredom thread, there was to be a secret meeting with the Liberators tonight. And CuLDud, who was invited for the first time couldn't miss it. He looked over his shoulders a couple of times a minute. A bit obvious you might say, but CuLDud was nervous, and wasn't eager to be followed. There were hundreds of people on the streets of General Discussion, the capital of IF, but as CuLDud approached the Boredom thread, he noticed that the traffic thinned, than eventually ceased.

CuLDud knocked on the door, and a narrow slit was opened near the top of the door.

"Password?" The voice asked gruffly.

"Long live freedom" CuLDud replied. He heard a few bolts open, and the door opened with a load creak. CuLDud rushed in as the door closed. A hand grabbed by his neck, and he was shoved up to the wall.

"Were you followed?"

"Of course not Kazza, you know me better than that." Kazza let go, and CuLDud was able to relax slightly.

"You better not have been followed." Kazza replied . "Or else Elazar will have your head, and Arthryn ours' !!"

Just then, somebody knocked on the door, and Kazza went over to open the slit and ask for a password. It was then what a sword struck right through the slit and scraped Kazza's right cheek. "That b**t* smilewinkgrin.gif !" Kazza swore. A voice echoed from above, "Warning, Kazza, your warning percentage is now 17%."

"I need to start making up my own curses." Kazza muttered. The door started to bang, and CuLDud ran off to tell the others what had just happened.

When Elazar heard this, he started letting out a stream of curses, and his warning percentage went up to 43%. "It's a good thing Arthryn didn't deprive us of the luxury we like to call the mobile phone." Stormfire said, suddenly stepping out of the shadows. A dim roar was heard of in the distance. Everybody froze. The noise was heard again, this time closer. CuLDud could hear panicked shouts and cries in the distance. "Dragon!" CuLDud shouted as he started to run.

"Everybody run!", he could hear Elazar shouting.

CuLDud only ran faster when he started hearing screams that were fairly close to him. He came to a back door entrance, and opened it to find a hail of arrows coming at him. CuLDud dived and rolled to one side. Arthryn had "invented" gunpowder as an update several years ago, but only reserved it's use for people such as Tim, and Isen, her right hand men, if there is such a thing. CuLDud just didn't know why she didn't distribute those thing amongst here soliders. But in the Liberators, gunpowder weapons were handed out freely, and were used in battle against Arthryn's forces. That's what gave them the upper hand.

CuLDud took out his pistol weapon, and fired it at Arthryn's troops. The loud noise startled some of the men, and as one fell down, four or five others fled. It was only a matter of time before the remaining survivours of the main assault came up behind CuLDud. Elazar, BTF, Stormfire, and Opifex.

"Is that all who survived?" CuLDud asked.

"We're not sure." replied Opifex, it was just then, that Kazza, Moondragon and Thorin came up from the corridor. A few arrows were shot at them, but none met their target.

"Any of you see Unconquerableflame?" Moondragon asked.

"Yeh", replied BTF, "The last place I saw Uflame was down that cursed Dragon's throat.

"It's a sad loss for us", CuLDud cut in, "but we need to focus on getting past them, he said pointing to the guards.

Elazar nodded, "We brought some weapons, but it isn't much." He handed out a few muskets and hand guns.

"Alright, on the count of three we charge them." CuLDud said. They all nodded in agreement. "One, two, three!" They ran out, each one expending his or hers bullets before the first minute was over. It was a good thing that Arthryn's men hadn't seen, or heard firearms before, or else they would've been dead. "Moondragon and Opifex have minor injuries, other than that, we're fine." Stormfire reported to Elazar.

"Good" Elazar replied, "We need to find a safe haven until we recover fully."


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Posted 22 July 2008 - 07:30 PM

I love this place! All these IF stories are so awesome. And yours is no exception.

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Posted 22 July 2008 - 07:48 PM

You need to change the font, too big. I'll start reading now...

Awesome story!! Could I be in it, since I'm like, you get the idea, just make sure you make me as a man! Not a girl. Also, I am good friends with Moony, and friend with BTF, and aquainted with the rest except for Elazar. Please?

Also, they can hide in my house next to the Inheritance FanFiction thread.

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Posted 22 July 2008 - 08:10 PM

You liberators will never prevail against facism and darkness. Face it. Interesting, though. I think Tim would be a better right-hand man than Mike. And Mike hates being in stories, so take it out.

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 12:21 AM

I bet I could survive for some time.


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Posted 23 July 2008 - 05:01 AM

Actually, I wouldn't be cursing Arthryn but you, CulDad. How dare you get followed! 2guns.gif popo.gif angry.gif

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 05:20 AM

QUOTE (FYADFanGirl @ Jul 23 2008, 01:10 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
You liberators will never prevail against facism and darkness. Face it. Interesting, though. I think Tim would be a better right-hand man than Mike. And Mike hates being in stories, so take it out.


Alright, Mike is now Tim. If it makes you feel any better.

P.S. My next part should be up in a short while.

P.P.S. I'm CuLDud not CulDad Kazza. cool.gif

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 05:40 AM

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My mind is asleep today.

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 05:46 AM

QUOTE (FYADFanGirl @ Jul 22 2008, 09:10 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
You liberators will never prevail against facism and darkness. Face it.

I agree. But I do want to see (read) what happens next.


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Posted 23 July 2008 - 05:59 AM

Chapter 2

As the small band of survivors fled the scene of the attack, Gramayre Ebrthil was coming around the corner. “What happened?” he asked.

“Arthryn attacked us.” Stormfire replied, “And now we need to find some place we can lay low for a while.”

“You can stay with me, my house is near the IF FanFiction thread.”

“That would be nice,” replied Elazar, “but we can’t risk being followed there. It’s too close to Tim’s Warnings System thread.”

“Where do we go then?” Thorin asked, stepping into the conversation.

“The advertising hut?” CuLDud suggested.

“Yes, that would be a good place, we can take shelter in my old thread, “Dragon Masters” nobody goes there anymore.” Elazar made the decision.

And so it was, that the small band, with the addition of Gramayre Ebrthil that they set off to the old part of town, The Advertising Hut. They had not gotten half way when footsteps were heard just around the corner. A lot of footsteps. “Scatter” Thorin whispered. They group disbanded and ran to several hiding places. CuLDud was out in the open when the soldiers came around the corner. Tim was at their head. CuLDud drew his pistol and started to run around the corner so as to avoid them as long as he could.

“After him!” Tim cried. A few arrows were set loose in desperation, but CuLDud was already around the corner. Running, looking for anything, anyone that would help him. Whizz, and arrow zoomed right past him, cutting his ear open. CuLDud cried out and stumbled, but kept running.

After about a minute of hard pursuit and evasion, CuLDud let a bullet fly at the soldiers. His aim proved true, for it hit the one in the lead, and sent him flying back into the others behind him. CuLDud now used his last reserve of strength to sprint as fast as he could, to get out of sight, and hopefully get to Elazar’s Dragon Masters thread to meet up with the rest of the group. HE was in the advertising hut now, he could see the advertisements hanging in banners. “Gaming: The Works”, “LegendofEragon.com” , There we go!, CuLDud thought to himself, “Dragon Masters”

CuLDud knocked on the door three times, before he got any response. A slit was opened and then the door was opened once CuLDud was identified. It was BTF who was watching the door. As CuLDud walked into the room, they were making a plan on how to get out of the mess they were in. CuLDud only half listened. But then, something popped into his mind, something very disturbing.

“Who told them?” CuLDud asked. They all looked at him, as if he was crazy, or maybe stupid.

“What do you mean, “Who told them?”?“ Elazar demanded.

“I mean, what if they didn’t just find us by themselves, what if somebody on the inside told them. Somebody that might be here, with us.” CuLDud was met with silence, something that was to last a long time.





End of Chapter 2

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 06:00 AM

Wait, whose side am I on? It appears I'm one of the "Liberators", but they are against the admins and mods, which would include me, so am I a rebel or not? Oh, and by the way, Opifex would side with Arthryn.
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Posted 23 July 2008 - 06:05 AM

Not all mods are bad in this, and I have Opifex on the Liberators because if Opifex moved to Arthryn, all of the Fan Club would go to Arthryn too. Whic means I would lose Kazza, and Moondragon. But who says Opifex isn't on Arthryn's side. You never know.

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 06:12 AM

The Fan Club has more people than that I believe, but I guess you have a point there (though I can't speak for everyone). But if there was a real rebellion, remember I'm the type that will probably betray others if I get something out of it, okay? ;).gif
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Posted 23 July 2008 - 06:22 AM

*cough*
You might not have noticed, but Isen is part of the fanclub, too. And I don't think Moondragon is. *checks*
No, she isn't. But Uflame, Stormfire, Grammayre Ebrithil and more are. If you like, I can give you a full list.

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Posted 23 July 2008 - 07:29 AM

A full list would be nice.

I could've sworn moondrag was in the fan club


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