[Lady Goldylocks]

Hi guys.. I've been looking forward to posting this. It's a comic I've been working on. And now I'll post the prologue. I'm not sure when I'll be able to post more. But I would really like to know what you guys think about it.

Please critique it both for the story and the art. I decided to post it here, since this is very much drawing and not so much text.

I know it turned out a little weird, I really don't like the bloddy face. But I'm pretty pleased with the rest of it. The one with the hands, still has some of the paper shining through, I'm going to fix that sometime. I could've used some more time with the finishing, and maybe I will do that sometime, but for now I'll keep it a little sketchy.

Please look at it in the real size...

This post has been edited by Lady Goldylocks: 05 January 2009 - 01:50 PM

[Emily]

I think it's pretty good. The drawings and the paintings were very well drawn. The only thing that I could see was the painting of the hands. The index finger on the right hand (Seeing from the picture) either looks broken or, I'm just not sure. I didn't know if that is what you wanted or what. I really love the shading you do on the paintings.

The smoke from his cigarette makes it look very real. The shading is the reason. I love it. Whenever the guy is loading the gun, it looks like his hand on top of the gun looks like it has a large lump. I guess it's just the...what's the bone that jutts out of your wrist? That's what it could be, maybe it should just be criticked on its brilliance.

The skin shading on it all is really well. The blending of the colors make the real shadings and color of the skin. The eyes that you painted look very comic-like. The (white of the paper, or paint?) made the lighting on the eye look very realistic.

I think you did a really good job with this comic. I think it could really carry on. The story is very nice, also. Very nice job. I look forward to more of this comic. So you will continue it, right?

[Lady Goldylocks]

Thanks Saphira Gal27, you're always so good to give thurrow critique

You're right about the index finger. I guess I was just a bit sloppy. It's either the shading, length or a comination that makes it that way. I'll try to fix it sometime.

On the eye, the white is the paper.

I'm glad you liked it I will try to continue it, but I don't know when I'll have time. But I thought it was very fun making it, so I'll definately do it.

[Emily]

Thank you very much . I kind of like it though. It looks like his finger may be broken. That might happen in the situation he is in. I think it adds a nice touch. Well, I won't bother you about the time. Just do it when you really want to . I'm excited.

Humm...I should try making a comic...seems like fun...I don't think I would do a good job on it, though. I'm not good at drawing people. Maybe I should try like a creature comic. I do get pretty busy and I don't have the materials. It's hard to afford stuff right now because our economy is really bad.

I think many people will like if you continued. Just trying to persuade

[Lady Goldylocks]

Thanks, and yeah I agree; It kinda looks like it's broken, and that's cool

I think I'm gonna wait it out a little, and see how other peole respond to the story. But I'm thinking about flashbacks for a long time if I am to continue the story. This was kind of a prologue or something, and the whole story that has happened is what I'll continue with for a long time. Currently the story is quite undeveloped. I just didn't have the patience to wait with posting the story.

EDIT: And you know, it's really time consuming. I guess I've spent at least seven hours on developing the story and drawing this page.

You should try it though, it's fun. And if you've trouble with drawing persons, and still want to. MAybe you should try copying some photos etc.

This post has been edited by Lady Goldylocks: 29 December 2008 - 09:53 PM

[Emily]

Yeah, I agree, wait for a couple of people to critic. I think they'll like it, but I'm not sure, I'm only one person. I'm sure you'll come up with the story soon enough. Patience does get the best of us. Sometimes it ends up great or it can end up completely destroyed. I think this decision ended up on the great side

Take your time with this. The more time, the whole lot better it will be. Ask family and friends what they think. If it's a sibling, make sure you trust them, that's what ended up with my drawing of the Eragon cover. My brother was like "It looks really good". But when I added the backround, he's like "I liked it better the other way. You should have kept it like that. I think you ruined it". I may be exagerating, but you know what I mean?

Good luck with the continuation (Is that even a word?) of this.

[Mikha]

First of all, I have to say, it's very expressive, which adds a lot to the impression it gives on the viewer. There is also an urgency to it, I like it.

It's good that you have shaded the different parts properly, too, this is most marked in the tied hands, the fingertips, the forearm.

May I ask about medium? What did you use to paint it?

[Lady Goldylocks]

My favourite: Gouache painting <3 I hadn't heard about it until I started at the school I'm going to. I prefer it both to acrylic and watercolors.

And thank you

This post has been edited by Lady Goldylocks: 29 December 2008 - 10:36 PM

[Mikha]

Ach so! I see, then. I've never used gouache myself, usually just colour pencils or acrylics when it comes to traditional art, biiiiit of pastel. I've never figured out how to use gouache, but I see you have

I should have a go!

[Ganashi]

Not my type of comic artistry but very good. I'm working on mine right now as well, but your drawings show promise and the story intrigues me. I can't wait to read more .

[Boons]

Very nice work Lady Goldylocks.
The general plot intrigues me and makes me wonder what its all about.
The artwork gives it a really gritty and dark feel which suits what the comic is about.
My only gripe with the artwork is the 3rd frame with the image of the bloodied face. It looks quite a bit bizarre. I was wondering what is the light colored oval shape thing on his cheek is?
Other than those minor gripes it overall looks very good and at times realistic.
The cigarette lighting and gun frame are beautiful

[Lady Goldylocks]

Yeah, I totally agree. I'm not happy with the way the face turned out at all. Thanks for the critique. The light colored oval shape, I'm not etirely sure what you mean. But it's either the cloth that he's gagged with or a wound.

[Boons]

Oh yes, It makes sense now It does appear to be a cloth.
Your welcome, I am glad to be of use.

[Stolen HaloX]

Amazing.

I love it.

Drawings were awesome.

[Obi-wan O'Neill]

Truly beautiful artwork, especially in the cigarrette panel. Can't wait to see more.