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A bit of a Poet c-3 Rate Topic: ****- 4 Votes

Poll: rate my poems please (8 member(s) have cast votes)

Which poems do you think are the best? pick3

  1. Joy/wind (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  2. Light to dark Diamonde (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  3. City of fire (3 votes [23.08%])

    Percentage of vote: 23.08%

  4. Reach for the stars (3 votes [23.08%])

    Percentage of vote: 23.08%

  5. Winter (1 votes [7.69%])

    Percentage of vote: 7.69%

  6. If I were the Ocean (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  7. Light (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  8. Dante`s inferno/Change of Heart (3 votes [23.08%])

    Percentage of vote: 23.08%

  9. Hope (3 votes [23.08%])

    Percentage of vote: 23.08%

  10. Flight (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

What poems do you want more of?

  1. Emotions (6 votes [54.55%])

    Percentage of vote: 54.55%

  2. Nature (2 votes [18.18%])

    Percentage of vote: 18.18%

  3. Thoughtful (3 votes [27.27%])

    Percentage of vote: 27.27%

Are long or short poems best?

  1. longer (6 votes [75.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 75.00%

  2. shorter (2 votes [25.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 25.00%

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#1 User is offline   sunfest13 Icon

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Posted 31 December 2008 - 02:29 PM


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This post has been edited by sunfest13: 07 August 2009 - 04:15 PM


Fly, for hope is gone with the breath of the wind; Only on wings like eagles can you chase it to the home of salvation.

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Live, Love, and be as Light, shedding joy upon others.

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Posted 31 December 2008 - 07:40 PM

OK, I read this because you told me too, and now I think this: I am no English teacher, in fact English is my worst subject (I go to an all Irish school, so duh) however I like them, but I don't know why!!!

I'll check your book next. I know more about novels than poems since I read them.

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Posted 01 January 2009 - 06:04 PM

All three poems are quite nice. They flow wonderfully and I see nothing wrong with them.
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Posted 02 January 2009 - 02:39 PM

Well, I guess somebody liked `em, here are some recent ones:


If I Were The Ocean

I`d be the sound of a breeze, floating through the woods, solemn, yet joyful, and always content.
I`d be the scent foretelling rain, cool, anxious, and climatic.
I`d taste like wet, fluffy clouds,neither bland nor colorful, but distinct in my own way.
I`d be a diamond blue, The hue of hope and hidden determination.
If I were the
ocean, I`d feel
WET.


LIGHT
Luminescence, glowing bright;
I am never truly alone;
Going or coming,
Home or away,
Thy light has always shone



Fly, for hope is gone with the breath of the wind; Only on wings like eagles can you chase it to the home of salvation.

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Live, Love, and be as Light, shedding joy upon others.

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Posted 11 January 2009 - 01:54 PM

QUOTE (sunfest13 @ Jan 11 2009, 04:08 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Here are some more recent ones.

Dante`s Inferno

Burning, the Hate; Eternal pain inside, the false welcome; You realize the torture
Voiceless, the Fear; the seeping dread, You realize the truth in fulfillment of greed,
Murky, the Soul; the endless steps, in endless lies,
Unwelcome you are to the smug laughter,
of Dante`s Inferno

True Change of Heart

Futile is love, But when Love comes freely
On the coercing blade; It becomes thy Shield;
Futile is truth, When Truth comes freely,
When torn from screams; It becomes thy Sword;
Futile is false hope, When Hope is True
when it is such; It becomes thy Armor;


I love the True Change of Heart poem, its ace. I like your poetry. ).gif
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Posted 11 January 2009 - 04:48 PM

QUOTE (Cecalae x @ Jan 11 2009, 12:54 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
QUOTE (sunfest13 @ Jan 11 2009, 04:08 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Here are some more recent ones.

Dante`s Inferno

Burning, the Hate; Eternal pain inside, the false welcome; You realize the torture
Voiceless, the Fear; the seeping dread, You realize the truth in fulfillment of greed,
Murky, the Soul; the endless steps, in endless lies,
Unwelcome you are to the smug laughter,
of Dante`s Inferno

True Change of Heart

Futile is love, But when Love comes freely
On the coercing blade; It becomes thy Shield;
Futile is truth, When Truth comes freely,
When torn from screams; It becomes thy Sword;
Futile is false hope, When Hope is True
when it is such; It becomes thy Armor;


I love the True Change of Heart poem, its ace. I like your poetry. ).gif

Thanks ).gif That`s on eof my favorites. I wrote those two as part of a series, where the mood goes from content to fearful to peaceful and joyful over a few poems.


Fly, for hope is gone with the breath of the wind; Only on wings like eagles can you chase it to the home of salvation.

BeCreative! l My Writing Blog l DESCRIPTIVE NINJA!


Live, Love, and be as Light, shedding joy upon others.

~Sol~

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Posted 18 January 2009 - 04:11 PM

What?!! No comments? I suppose nobody comes here often anyways.


Flowing water,
Rushing through the stream bank,
bends and splits
The fluid light
that escapes the foliage above.


Fly, for hope is gone with the breath of the wind; Only on wings like eagles can you chase it to the home of salvation.

BeCreative! l My Writing Blog l DESCRIPTIVE NINJA!


Live, Love, and be as Light, shedding joy upon others.

~Sol~

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Posted 21 January 2009 - 12:43 PM

QUOTE (sunfest13 @ Jan 18 2009, 04:11 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
What?!! No comments? I suppose nobody comes here often anyways.


Flowing water,
Rushing through the stream bank,
bends and splits
The fluid light
that escapes the foliage above.




here`s a coment: WOW your poetry is really great I love all of them!!!!!!!!!!!

can you please post more unworthy.gif

This post has been edited by eragonXarya: 21 January 2009 - 02:21 PM

To those who LIKED "the Inheritance cycle" will LOVE "The Wheel Of Time" by Robert Jordan (R.I.P)
Why is it so hard to get a Dragon Rider to listen to you?
Because his head is always in the clouds!
My book four Rider of fate HERE

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Posted 24 January 2009 - 01:01 PM

That last one was especially good, I really liked it. smiling.gif


You have gained me as a fan respect.gif


looking forward for more thumbsup.gif
To those who LIKED "the Inheritance cycle" will LOVE "The Wheel Of Time" by Robert Jordan (R.I.P)
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Because his head is always in the clouds!
My book four Rider of fate HERE

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Posted 24 January 2009 - 06:35 PM

Fans are good, I like to be cool (bad double pun).

Anyways, I`m down to my last previously written poem, I need to return to my poetry/writing/music corner.

Here`s Flyte, a 5 sense poem I wrote for English:


Flight is the blue of a midnight sky, with the twinkling of stars above;

Flight tastes of airy bread, fresh from the oven;

It sounds like harp strings gently being brushed by the wind;

Flight smells like the aroma of the plains on a warm morn;

It looks like clouds streaming past with a fluffy cadence of their own;

Flyte feels like freedom, with the gentle breeze wafting by.


Sorry about the flatness of it, I`m better at longer poems, and the next ones I write should have more feeling and style.

This post has been edited by sunfest13: 24 January 2009 - 06:38 PM


Fly, for hope is gone with the breath of the wind; Only on wings like eagles can you chase it to the home of salvation.

BeCreative! l My Writing Blog l DESCRIPTIVE NINJA!


Live, Love, and be as Light, shedding joy upon others.

~Sol~

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Posted 25 January 2009 - 10:09 AM

It is good, though I agree with you, it is a bit flat. But it`s still good. thumbup.gif

Like I`ve said before YOU`RE A HREAT POET! thumbsup.gif

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Posted 25 January 2009 - 12:54 PM

QUOTE (eragonXarya @ Jan 25 2009, 09:09 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
It is good, though I agree with you, it is a bit flat. But it`s still good. thumbup.gif

Like I`ve said before YOU`RE A HREAT POET! thumbsup.gif

What`s a hreat poet?

Anyways, it`s sunny out today, and I might start writing when I walk home from school, so you can probably expect some more poems soon.

EDITED: I finished a decent length poem, but I still have to type it, and I`ll probably add to my story before posting, so...

This post has been edited by sunfest13: 25 January 2009 - 06:31 PM


Fly, for hope is gone with the breath of the wind; Only on wings like eagles can you chase it to the home of salvation.

BeCreative! l My Writing Blog l DESCRIPTIVE NINJA!


Live, Love, and be as Light, shedding joy upon others.

~Sol~

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Posted 27 January 2009 - 10:24 AM

QUOTE (sunfest13 @ Jan 25 2009, 12:54 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
QUOTE (eragonXarya @ Jan 25 2009, 09:09 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
It is good, though I agree with you, it is a bit flat. But it`s still good. thumbup.gif

Like I`ve said before YOU`RE A HREAT POET! thumbsup.gif

What`s a hreat poet?

Anyways, it`s sunny out today, and I might start writing when I walk home from school, so you can probably expect some more poems soon.

EDITED: I finished a decent length poem, but I still have to type it, and I`ll probably add to my story before posting, so...



Sorry it was soppused to be GREAT POET. sweat.gif

And post whenever fits you, I`ll wait patiently thumbsup.gif


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Posted 03 February 2009 - 09:26 AM

I think it was very good, and here it is snowy thumbsup.gif
To those who LIKED "the Inheritance cycle" will LOVE "The Wheel Of Time" by Robert Jordan (R.I.P)
Why is it so hard to get a Dragon Rider to listen to you?
Because his head is always in the clouds!
My book four Rider of fate HERE

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Posted 03 February 2009 - 01:35 PM

I've been into three forms of writing in the past six years:
Poetry
Fiction Writing
Song Writing

I could say I'm pretty good at all three, or at least I know what the heck I'm talking about when I critique them. I've seen a lot of poetry, and yours are on my top ten list, no doubt.

If you want to see my work, post at YodecInk in this section. I'm into more rhythmic poetry, but I'm trying to work on others. I just LOVE poetry. And that's interesting to hear coming from a guy... xD

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