[hairador]

This is a poem and I wish you would read it and reply to it.


A breath on my lips.
A cry of my heart.
Waiting to be heard.
Wanting to be loved.


Neglected and broken.
Abused and out spoken.
Death came to soon.
I never uttered a word.


Nobody wants me,
nobody cares.
Is this what I'm worth?
Am I just a burden?


If given the chance
what would I say?
I wold say “somebody
love me, somebody care!”


who am I you ask,
why should I care?
Well I'm a babe not
even born.


Killed before birth, they
gave me nothing not even
a breath.


They called me a cell not even
a living being.
But they were wrong I had a
life. I could have lived.



So why did they kill me?
Why did they abuse me?
For the bettering of man kind they say,
to cure others by taking my life.

I am an unborn child killed before birth, I crime I call it, they call it a cure.

This post has been edited by hairador: 15 March 2009 - 01:15 PM

[Prudery]

Wow, um, just wow. That was amazing. Very deep. Thanks for warning me to get a tissue.

Overall it is very nice. There is a lot of depth and feeling in it.

[hairador]

Wow, um, just wow. That was amazing. Very deep. Thanks for warning me to get a tissue.

Overall it is very nice. There is a lot of depth and feeling in it.

Your welcome.


I try to put all my fealings and heart into my poems.

i also did this for all the aborted children that neaver had the chance to speek there mind and defend their lives.

[Lord Raglan]

This is about abortion right? Technically, any aborted baby wouldn't be able to speak like that (heck, it takes about a year for babies outside the womb to start talking), but it does give a pretty good voice to what it might say if it could talk. One more thing, a cell is considered the basic unit of life, so your line "they called me a cell, not even a living being" is fairly inaccurate.You could say "they called me a cell, not even a whole being" instead.

This post has been edited by dragon eater: 13 March 2009 - 11:33 PM

[Prudery]

It was very well done. You clearly made a point about what you were trying to say. Good job!!!

[hairador]

This is about abortion right? Technically, any aborted baby wouldn't be able to speak like that (heck, it takes about a year for babies outside the womb to start talking), but it does give a pretty good voice to what it might say if it could talk. One more thing, a cell is considered the basic unit of life, so your line "they called me a cell, not even a living being" is fairly inaccurate.You could say "they called me a cell, not even a whole being" instead.

The word "being" means human in this so when the child says "not even a being" it is refering to them not calling him/her a human being. but i might change it sometime if a get any one elss to comment on this.


No, an aborted baby would not be able to speek, but it would if it had been given the chance to live life. I do beleave that abortion is a crime and should be delt with as so.


Oh, thanks for commenting.

[Emily]

Wow...that was really good. The thought of that just kills me, killing babys before they're born. You gave much depth in that. I know that it will be known to more people. It's very real and very cruel. Who knows, they could have cured cancer one day. You did very well on this.

[hairador]

Wow...that was really good. The thought of that just kills me, killing babys before they're born. You gave much depth in that. I know that it will be known to more people. It's very real and very cruel. Who knows, they could have cured cancer one day. You did very well on this.

I have a story about cancer I wrote but it is to faith related to post on here, stupid rule.



The funny thing is I wrote this in about 10 minutes last night but I put every thing from my heart into it, God bless you for reading it.

[Emily]

God bless you for writing it. I'm glad I read this poem. I'd love to read more of your poems that are very moving like this one. Very good job. I like it alot, even if it is very sad.

[hairador]

God bless you for writing it. I'm glad I read this poem. I'd love to read more of your poems that are very moving like this one. Very good job. I like it alot, even if it is very sad.

I might write something on abuse or abandon kids.

[Africander]

This is a poem and I wish you would read it and reply to it.


A breath on my lips.
A cry of my heart.
Waiting to be heard.
Wanting to be loved.


Neglected and broken.
Abused and out spoken.
Death came to soon.
I never uttered a word.


Nobody wants me,
nobody cares.
Is this what I'm worth?
Am I just a burden?


If given the chance
what would I say?
I wold say “somebody
love me, somebody care!”


who am I you ask,
why should I care?
Well I'm a babe not
even born.


Killed before birth, they
gave me nothing not even
a breath.


They called me a cell not even
a living being.
But they were wrong I had a
life. I could have lived.



So why did they kill me?
Why did they abuse me?
For the bettering of man kind they say,
to cure others by taking my life.

I am an unborn child killed before birth, I crime I call it, they call it a cure.

If an unborn aborted baby could speak, it would say that^^ it really made me think. Hope you write more. have a look at some of my poems if you like, link in the sig

[hairador]

This is a poem and I wish you would read it and reply to it.


A breath on my lips.
A cry of my heart.
Waiting to be heard.
Wanting to be loved.


Neglected and broken.
Abused and out spoken.
Death came to soon.
I never uttered a word.


Nobody wants me,
nobody cares.
Is this what I'm worth?
Am I just a burden?


If given the chance
what would I say?
I wold say “somebody
love me, somebody care!”


who am I you ask,
why should I care?
Well I'm a babe not
even born.


Killed before birth, they
gave me nothing not even
a breath.


They called me a cell not even
a living being.
But they were wrong I had a
life. I could have lived.



So why did they kill me?
Why did they abuse me?
For the bettering of man kind they say,
to cure others by taking my life.

I am an unborn child killed before birth, I crime I call it, they call it a cure.

If an unborn aborted baby could speak, it would say that^^ it really made me think. Hope you write more. have a look at some of my poems if you like, link in the sig

I am going to start writeing a poem here in a minute.

Thank you for your kind words.

may God bless your day.

[hairador]

This is a very sad, but true, poem. please comment.





Somebody save me,
somebody help.
Somebody love me.
Somebody care.


I had a family but they
abandon me. I had a life
but they told me I was nothing.
I have a God but they tell me he
does not care about me.


I take in the cold air and cry
for someone, anyone to help!
But no one comes, no one cares.
Why does no one care why does no
one love me?


A man comes every night and
hits me, I try to fight him but
he is to strong. People pass me bye
while he does what he wants with me
not bothering to help, not wanting to
be involved.



He leaves me broken and naked,
shaderd and hopeless. I lay there
not knowing what will happen.
Who will cloth me? Who will
mend my wounds?



But there, on the street way,
what is it? I pick it up knowing
what it is, knowing what I have to do.


I put it to my head and put my finger on
the trigger, I say one last good bye to this
world and fire the gun ending my hopeless,
and pitiful life...

no one loved me, a orphan girl abandon by her mother at the age of five. No one helped me no one wanted me. No one showed me any grace or Mersey. hopefully someday someone will help someone like me and end their suffering, I am to far away for anyone to help. In heaven someone will love me, someone will care.

[Pixel]

Hairador, you're only allowed one topic for all your poems; try and look over the rules a little more, thanks!

[hairador]

Hairador, you're only allowed one topic for all your poems; try and look over the rules a little more, thanks!

oop's sorry.


guess ill change the name then.


thanks for telling me.