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The Last of Alliance of Men and Elves What could've happened-Chapter 1 is here! Rate Topic: ***** 1 Votes

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Posted 01 April 2009 - 05:25 PM

I've always wanted to write an LOTR fanfic, since I am such a huge fan. I love the Last Alliance era, so I thought I'd give it a shot:

Prologue

Gil-galad stood, and looked down at the port known as the Gray Havens. He was worried, because it had been quite sometime since he had been contacted by his friends and war allies, the Numenoreans. They lived in Andor, or the land of Gift, or, in the Elven language, Numenore. It was an island located near to Valinor, where the Elves of Middle-earth went when they grew tired of the normal world. However, since their lastest king, Ar-Pharazon, had taken power, they had barely contacted his folk, who lived in the wide and fair country of Lindon.

Gil-Galad, the High King of the Noldor in Middle-earth, controlled all lands from the western shores of the Great Sea, to the Tower Hills in Eriador, an enormous land west of the Misty Mountains, the largest mountain in Middle-earth. Gil-gald's kingdom contanied the final exiles of the Noldor, a clan of Elves that had fled from Valinor when their most sacred jewels, the Silmarills, were stolen. Many had died in the attempt to regain the jewels, and many more had returned to Valinor at the end of the war. Gil-galad, however, had elected to stay in Middle-earth, because his people, the Noldorin elves, had no other leader. His chief vassal, and heir, Elrond, had founded a refuge for the elves who dwelled in Eriador. It was named Imladris in Elvish, and men called it Rivendell, though few besides the Faithful Numenoreans had seen it.

The reson Gil-galad was worried avout the Numenoreans was that he had heard no word from them since Ar-Pharazon took Suaron prisoner. He was thinking of even going there himself, and leaving the rule of his kingdom to Elrond for a few years, to deal with Sauron. He (Gil-Galad) did not for sure what the Numenoreans had done with Sauron, but he had not been put to death, of that, he was sure. Yes,thought Gil-galad, I will bring the peace back to the Men of Numenor. "Gildor! Ready my ship for departure!"

As Gil-galad took the first step towards his personal ship, Arnor, he stumbled, as an unseen force propelled him to the ground. Next, there was a big BOOM! and the ground vibrated. From far in the west, he heard trumpet sounds, the yells of dying men, and saw something that resembled a great waterfall. Then, there was darkness. Just as vision faded, Gil-gald saw, in the west, a man. It looked as if he was standing upon the coulds. His right hand was upraised, as if he directing music, and his left hand clasped an enormous brown staff. Blackness claimed Gil-galad's brain, and he fell unconscious.


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This post has been edited by Greeni: 10 April 2009 - 08:26 AM

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Posted 07 April 2009 - 05:29 PM

nice story could have had more to it, but good job thumbsup.gif

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Posted 08 April 2009 - 05:16 AM

More descriptions. The story's idea is good.
The destruction of the Numenoreans does sound a bit melodramatic. I would change it if it were my story.
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Posted 08 April 2009 - 01:14 PM

This could be really good! I too am a big LOTR fan and I am very interested to see where this will go. I don't understand why Gil-galad fainted though? question.gif
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Posted 09 April 2009 - 08:06 PM

QUOTE (hrothgarknurlan @ Apr 8 2009, 12:14 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
This could be really good! I too am a big LOTR fan and I am very interested to see where this will go. I don't understand why Gil-galad fainted though? question.gif

Thanks a lot for the compliments, guys. Illuvatar made everyone faint because obviously he needed to use great power to destroy sauron and numenor. The next chapter is titledThe Founding of Gondor Something else...Made you look! thumbup.gif
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Posted 10 April 2009 - 08:24 AM

A few years later...

Chapter 1 (Part 1)

The Founding of Gondor

Isildur gazed in wonder at the newly completed city of Minas Ithil. So many events had had happened in a short span of time. His grandfather had died, his country and home had been destroyed thanks to crazed king, and he had lost his father, maybe for good, he did not yet know. At least Anorien is still with me, thought Isildur.

Isildur watched as several companies of Numenor's warriors filed through the city's main gate. "Captain," he said, turning to the man next to him, "It's time to depart."

"Yes, sir," the captain said. Now that the final warriors had arrived to swell Minas Ithil's garrison, Isidur now needed to ride to Osgiliath, and supervise the final constructions of the new capital of Gondor. Once it was finished, Isildur would send for Anorien, who was as of now dwelling in completed city of Minas Anor, the Tower of the Sun.

Isildur walked over to his horse, which he had brought with him from the drowning of Numenor, and swung his leg up over the horse's flank, and then proceeded to pull hinself into the saddle. His captain, personal guard, and train of cavalry were all donig the same. Isildur spurred his horse into motion, and passed through the main gate of Minas Ithil, into the Ithil Vale. His men followed him at a slow, but steady pace. "Move out!" he shouted, and spurred his horse onto a gallop. Behind him he heard his guard direct their horses to speed up.

They kept this pace for several hours, as the green forests and villages of Ithilien sped by. Around mid-day, Isildur and his companions stopped for a meal and rest, in a village along the main road of Ithilien. After they finished their meal, the company made ready to leave, until the leader of this town's rangers, dressed in a green and brown cloak, made his towards the King. "Sir," he said, and came over and whispered in Isidur's ear, "One of rangers has reported a company of have blocked the main road to the Capital."

"Do not worry," the king spoke. My companions and I will destroy them. Then send a force of about fifty rangers to destroy any of the remaining Orcs," he told the commander. "Riders of Numenor!" he shouted, "Today, we shall claim our lands, and found a kingdom! TO BATTLE! The company charged, all the to the spot where the Orcs lay in wait. Several ranks of spear wielding Orc Warriors were there, blocking the road. Then, a tall burly Orc, whom Isildur took to be the formation's captain, stepped forward, a banner carrier by his side.

The huge Orc turned to Isildur and cried, "Our master wishes to speak with you, human!" Isildur knew who the 'Master' was. The traitor. The Dark Lord. Sauron.

Isildur did not reply, but gave the order to have the horns blown, and roared, "Charge!" His horsemen yelled and rode forward, the hooves of the horses thundering against the ground. When they reached the Orcs, several black arrows whisled out form amongst the trees-and hit the Numenoreans. Just as Isildur was about to abandon hope and the charge, several wooden arrow shafts came from the other side of the Orcs. This time the Orcs were hit, causing several dozen casualties. That, combined with Isildur's reckless charge completely destryed the Orc formation. Several Rangers appeared form where the brown shafts had been fired and joined the assault, using swords and spears on foot. Meanwhile, the hail of balck arrows had stopped.

"Pursue them!" he shouted to the Rangers.

"Do not worry, My King. Not a single one shall escape alive." Isildur tossed the Rnager a proud salute, and gesture of thanks.

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Several hours later, Isidur and his cavalry arrived at Osgiliath. He saw there his brother waiting for him. "Welcome, brother," said Anorien. "Today we shall be kings, in this new and great realm of Gondor!"



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This post has been edited by Greeni: 18 April 2009 - 07:17 PM

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Posted 18 June 2009 - 10:41 AM

OK, after a VERY long absence, I want to start this story back up again. Anyonr interested?
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Posted 20 June 2009 - 04:53 PM

QUOTE (Greeni @ Jun 18 2009, 11:41 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
OK, after a VERY long absence, I want to start this story back up again. Anyonr interested?


I am interested. I love LOTR, any chance you want to join a LOTR rpg? You won't have to wait. King of Gondor awaits you. http://www.inheritan...showtopic=48825

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