[FriendofElves]

There was this one part in Brisingr that made me think of this poem. Ill tell you what it was at the bottom of the page. Try to guess what part it was.


RULERS OF THE SKY

Up in the sky
On the ceiling of the World,
The Dragon soars
and her Rider cries,

Watch us fly,
Watch us soar.
She who roars,
and I who cry.
Enemies beware,
of the Rulers of the Sky.

Flying high
Among the clouds.
The dragon roars
and her Rider cries,

I help my friends,
I destroy my foes.
I who am your destroyer
and yet your savior.
Enemies beware,
of the Rulers of the Sky

The air is thin,
The clouds are moist.
The Dragon soars
and still her Rider cries,

The view is great,
the cities so small.
I can see for miles,
I see you all.
Enemies beware,
of the Rulers of the Sky.

The enemies run,
The Rider fights.
The dragon soars,
and once more, her Rider cries,

We have slewn your allies,
We have desroyed your soldiers.
Your forces are gone,
Your rule over-thrown.
Remaining enemies beware,
of the Rulers of the Sky.





I hope you like it! Please leave feedback! Oh! The part was when Saphira and Eragon are flying around and Eragon said that they were the rulers of the sky and saphira said that they were on the ceiling of the world. That sounded like a poem to me so i wrote more to it.

This post has been edited by FriendofElves: 10 May 2009 - 05:52 PM

[Cecalae x]

This is a great poem. I love IC related poems and there are very few in the ''cafe'' though lol. I love how you use the first person and how you use different angles for description. I think I might post some more Inheritance related poems soon too. Do you have any more?

[Survival]

Ah, I really like it... better than most Inheritance related poems, methinks...

[FriendofElves]

i might have another. its aryas point of view through the entire story. and a little bit after too. its really long.9 sheets filled, front and back.

[Cecalae x]

wow. cool. cant wait.

[FriendofElves]

Okay. I know that this isnt the 9 page Arya one but i am still editing that one. But here is one on the battle with Galby.

Battle
A great battle begins,
and two pairs of lovers,
go off to fight.

The battle begins,
three dragons fight.
The air is filled
with cries of hate.

The battle continues,
three immortals fight.
Their swords collide,
and sparks do fly.

One immortal,
he weilds a sword of fiery blue.
He and one other,
she with a sword of forest green,
strike down the third.

The battle has ended,
the two pairs of lovers rejoice
and thie families and friends
celebrate the fall of the dark king.


Hope you like it! I am very close to finishing the editing on the Arya one so just be paitent a little while longer.

This post has been edited by FriendofElves: 07 May 2009 - 07:19 PM

[pokefan550]

Awesome job!! I never knew you write poetry! You really need to post the 9 page one.

[potter573]

You are good at it. The first one was better than the last one.

[FriendofElves]

Remember how i said that i was almost done editing the 9 page Arya one? Well here it is.

The world keeps turning.
My fear keeps burning.
By these feelings,
this man i am changing.

Will my love for him
be our saving grace?
Or make eeverything blow up in our face?
This war we should win,
Though I will long for my love.

These feelings I have,
I have felt but once before.
The one I loved
was killed by Urgals,
and he left me alone.

I was tortured,
beaten and bruised.
Durza was evil,
it was no ruse.

You came to me one day,
My new love of my life.
i was afraid you were a trick,
But i soon realized you were no lie.

You carried me away,
on dragons back.
Away to the mountians,
Away to the Varden.

There was poison in my blood,
and i never awoke.
Until the spell was broke.

Their helers chanted,
In the language of old.
They healed my body,
but not my soul.

Then came the day
when more urgals came.
Far'than Dur was invaded
but the Urgals did fall.

The shade called Durza
made an appearence.
I flew on Saphira
and came to your aid.

You stabbed Durzas heart
but you were wounded,
and i was so scared.
If you were to die,
my would would come to its end.

But you were healed,
and i stayed by your side.
The days were long,
and full of confusion.

As i sat by your side,
i attempted to see.
To see just what there was,
between you and me.

I was blind to it then,
and was for a while.
i knew you loved me,
but did I love you back?

When you awoke,
I kid my thoughts.
For if you knew where my true feelings lay,
You would stay with me,
every night and every day.

We could not afford this
for a war was ahead.
You were a weapon,
and you needed a clear head.

But what i did not forsee
was how strong of feelings you felt for me.
That confusion for you,
that which i had hoped to avoid,
muddled your brain and confused you more.

So I turned you away.
I tried to stop my feelings,
to let them go.
I could not do it,
but i did not lwt them show.

We went to my home, my beloved Ellesmera.
The home of the Elves,
the home of your masters.

Oromis and Gladr were pleased to see you.
You needed your training,
so I left you alone.

I think i confused you,
when i avoided speaking.
It was neccesary,
for our chances at victory,
were on the rise.

The chances grew larger,
as you advanced in tour training.
Oromis-elda taught you someting new.
He told you of fariths,
and what they do.

As you made one,
I happened to be there.
The feelings I had,
were locked up in a box
deep in my head.
I hoped you did not feel the same.

then you made
that wonderful farith.
It was of me,
and your true feelings showed.

I smashed its beauty
out of anger and fear.
I was also happy,
so gloriously happy.

But your feelings scared me
for the would they did threaten.

For these feelings we share
might cloud our eyes.
To the present
and to the war ahead.

I was angry with myself,
for not dennying you sooner.
i had hoped you would not feel love,
love directed at me.

And yet i hoped you would,
for i did not wish to loose you,
my love of my life.

i turned you away,
several times
over the course of our stay.
I attempted to avoid you,
but could not stay away.

It was like we had both swollowe magnets,
and they would not go away.
When you left Ellesmera
to return to the Varden,
I rode with you,
on your dragon,
Saphira.

When we returned,
it was to do battle.
Your cousin came,
with your entire village in tow.

You fought with Murtagh,
a freind tuned foe.
He called you his brother,
he said that your father was Morzan.

You couldnt defeate him,
but he did not take you away.
He left you there,
all scared and confused.

We had thought you had died,
i cried so hard.
Nasuada comforted me,
until you walked through her doors.

I wanted to kiss you,
to hug you,
to hold you close.
But all I did,
was say hello.

Nasuada asked you what had happened,
and why I could not scry you.

You explained,
you told us of your father.
We told you not to tell
the rest of the Varden.
They would worry that you would betray us,
as did your brother.

You were distracted,
for the next few days.
I spoke with Saphira,
and she said you were sad.
and very confused.

She took to the skies,
with me on her back.
I confided my feelings
about you while engulfed in clouds.

I started to cry,
when I said I was worried.
Worried of the difference in the war,
my feelings would make.
I told her I was tires
of not telling you the truth.

Saphira realized I was sad,
and very confused.
She told me to follow
my hearts directions.

My heart told me to tell you,
to confess my love.
Later, I tried,
but then I grew scared.
I could not tell you for fear of the world,
but my heart was bursting,
my love for you was breaking free.

Days passed,
and turned to months.
Murtagh attacked us
and killed the king of the dwarves.
Nasuada sent you,
to help with the election.

She would not consent,
and let me go with you.
After the dwarves,
you returned to my home.
You finished your training,
and finally came home.

Immediately, you left.
You had promised Roran
to rescue his bride.

They came back without you,
and said you had not died.
You had stayed to finish the Ra’zac.
My warrior,
My friend,
My one true love.

I ran off,
to bring you back,
Nasuada said no,
but I did not turn back.

I found you quickly,
And we ran quite slow.
We had a conversation,
by fires glow.
I told you of Faolin,
and how he had died.

I could see you were jealous,
though that feeling,
you tried to hide.
Off you went,
into the woods.

When you returned,
you had in your hands
a beautiful lily.

You gave it to me,
and it made me smile.
For I had been crying,
and you had eased my pain.

I almost told you,
right then and right there.
But instead I created
a small grass boat.
I made it fly,
as it would forever.

Later, as we sat,
some spirits came
out of the trees.
They gave us there energy
and they made you smile.

The rest then flew,
over to the lily from you.
They circled around it,
then made it gold.
The flower still lived,
and it would still grow.

The spirits flew off,
and the quiet returned.
We stared at the lily,
then went to sleep.

My dreams were confusing,
they were about you.
In the morning,
we woke,
and continued our journey.
We made it to the Varden,
without incident or worry.

Our feelings were still there,
still hidden and locked.
You training still was not finished,
so you returned to Ellesmera.
when you returned,
we were in battle.

You said that your father,
was not who we once thought.
He was actually Brom,
a man of much strength.

You and I,
we went to fight.

We found the magicians,
that they were creating a shade.
You feel to the ground,
at contact from Gladr.
The shade was created,
and took me by my throat.

You then stood up
and distracted the shade.
He threw me against a wall.
Your distraction allowed me,
to do as you once did,
and stab him in his heart.

You tell me the fate,
of Oromis and Gladr.
I collapse into your arms,
and cry into your shoulder.

We return to the Varden,
when my sobbing subsides.
Nasuada is sorry,
about the loss of your masters.

There are many more battles,
as we fight Galbatorix’s rule.
then we reach Uru’baen,
and you destroy the false King.
Roran is raised,
to take his place.

As we explore,
this ancient castle,
we discover a room,
sealed with wards.

The wards nearly killed you,
but we broke thorough the door.
What did we find,
but the things we were searching for.
Life, so green,
hearts,
so round.

It was the last of the dragons,
we gazed upon.
Their hidden
heart-of-hearts.
Glowing,
Golden,
round,
Eldunari.

The life so green,
the last dragon egg.
The one we awaited,
who never showed up.

Now we know why,
for it was locked in this room.
No on e to touch it,
or will it to hatch.

It didn’t find its rider
until that very moment.
I walked straight to it,
as if in a trance.
You walked behind me,
and watched what I did.
I picked up the egg,
and it called me its rider.

My love and I,
we both stood stiff.
We watched my dragon
begin to hatch.

I placed to egg,
upon the floor.
My dragon hatched
and he touched my hand.
He realeased some energy,
into my palm.

I think I passed out,
for the next thing I knew,
my head was in your lap
and my dragon,
on my chest.

You had sat there with me,
all night long.
You jumped away,
for you thought Id be mad.

But all I did,
was sit up and smile.
You were confused,
But I wasn’t any longer.

And then I saw him,
my beautiful dragon.
So green,
and so beautiful.
And all mine.

He doesn’t yet speak,
but I know he will soon.
He communicates with images,
not words for now.

I love him a lot,
and he is my friend.
Forever I will love him,
until my end.

That very night,
I explained what I felt,
and my feelings towards you
and that I knew you still felt it too.

You were surprised,
so very astonished.
You wrapped me in your arms,
and you kissed me,
softly,
gently.

You pulled me close,
so I could not get away.
I apologized for turning you away.
I explained my reasons,
and you saw them too.
You even agreed.

The war has ended,
we can express our feelings.
I will love you forever,
as the love of my life.




Hope you like it! It actually tuned out to be 11 pages in Word, so it was a little longer thatn i originally said.

[SeYleR]

Wow. I was really impressed with all of them, particularly the lengthy one. I noticed a few grammatical mistakes though, such as "There" when it should be "their" and so on.

[Blazing Elf]

Wow I think all of them were good

[Blazing Dragon]

Very nice poetry. I liked the first one.

[FriendofElves]

Ive got another one for you people. Finally. Its one of my favorites actually...

A Single Star

A single star,
Alone in the night.
It has no fear
For its light is bright.

It lights the way
For many who wander.
Why its alone,
Many do ponder.

The star is alone,
But is never afraid
For its just keeps marching
in it's own parade.



And heres another. Its actually form Eragons POV which is a change for me.

Greatest Fear

Forget me not,
For I will cry.
And tears will fall,
from beneath my eye.

You bring me close,
You hold me near.
That I will leave,
You never fear.

That is my fear,
It is above them all.
You may deny it,
But its chances are not small.

Your looks are amazing,
mine are less fine.
You deserve someone
Who is much more divine.

I love you now,
And I hold you dear.
Now I have told you,
My greatest fear.



And another... From Aryas POV, as is my usual.

Shattered Confusion

My confusion
Rocks my bones.
Like a waterfall
Of rolling stones.

Round and round,
They tumble down

Round and round,
'till they hit the ground.

Once upon the ground,
they shatter.
Into bits and pieces,
They do scatter.

When they shatter,
And pieces fly,
Up I look,
Into the sky.

Up in the heavens,
A dragon of blue.
On her back, a Rider,
dressed in this hue.

Confused I am no longer
For now I see whats true.
I love a man,
And that man,
Is you.



This next one could work of ExA after they get together because Eragon will have to leave Arya for some Rider duty at some point.


No Fear

Walk away,
But have no fear.
For you are the only person,
I will ever hold dear.

Dont forget me,
thats all I ask.
And do not hide from me,
behind any mask.

As I walk away,
As I watch you go,
I feel my love for you,
rush from head to toe.


This is just a fun one I wrote about magic.



No Title

THe unseen force
that guides us all.
Through the summer,
and into fall.

With leaves of colour,
and wings that flutter.

All the day,
they move along.
As they fly,
they sing the song.

The song of love,
the song of fun.
Sing along,
but make no pun.

Magic here,
Magic there.
Its all alround,
its everywhere!

Dont you see it?
Because see it i do.
Its in all of us.
Even in you.


This one i need to explain. I think that when magic-users enchant something, they put part of the emotion they are feeling at that point in time. When Arya was enchanting the grass boat, i think she was feeling great love and that was put into the boat.

Arya's Grass Boat

My little grass boat,
how you fly so high.
You fly unseen,
across the sky.

Fly away,
move along.
Fly to where the love feels strong.

Soaring high,
above the ground.
You fly so high a mountian,
is just a mound.
(dont like that stanza)

Love you seek.
Love youll find.
'Till the end of time,
these lovers you will bind.



That is all I have for now. I should have more soon when i look through my other poems.

[Cecalae x]

Nice set of poems. Its wonderfully refreshing to read actuall IC poems, cause most people just post normal poems, I got the feeling that they'd prefer normal poems instead of IC ones, but I think I might post some more IC ones of mine.

I really liked ''A Single Star'', but my favorite was ''Shattered confusion'', you reflected Arya's possible emotions really well.

Keep it up.

C

[potter573]

What really influenced me is your simple rhyming. It makes the poems much more light and delightful to read. I have some issues with the longer one but your short poems are artful pieces of poetry.

A few suggestions:

(Shattered Confusions)

Once upon the ground,
Maybe upon the ground will sound much better.

(A single Star)

Why its alone,
"Why is it alone" may flow along better.