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Need help with Description Of the things on a techmarine's back.

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Posted 07 June 2009 - 03:26 AM

How would you describe the metal things on his back. In my story, some of the characters have these metal limbs, but I don't think my description is very good.



So, I need help.

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Posted 07 June 2009 - 04:07 AM

Giant metal pincers? Metalic snakes rising from its back jaws gaping?
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Posted 07 June 2009 - 10:10 AM

Thats pretty good, any other descriptions?
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Posted 08 June 2009 - 12:24 AM

Do you have a picture of sorts? That'll give me a base from which to describe. However, i'll give it a shot...

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The Hydraulic arms shifted noiselessly, almost anticipating the upcoming battle.

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Spidery pincers hung over the armour's reinforced helmet, the claws ready to rip and tear at the frail bodies of opponents.


That's my guess. I like knowing how the things move and act though, also what kind of image you want to get across.

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Posted 08 June 2009 - 06:22 AM

How do you want them described? Good or evil?
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Posted 08 June 2009 - 02:11 PM

BAsically, the characters have many bionic parts. And they have 4 or 6 of these kind of things implanted into his back. No armour or anything. They are not evil or good as such, just part of what ever character they are implanted on.
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Posted 09 June 2009 - 06:37 PM

Apendages? (dang, this computer lacks spellcheck) Apendages would be my guess.
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Posted 10 June 2009 - 02:13 AM

QUOTE (DwarvesRule @ Jun 10 2009, 01:37 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Apendages? (dang, this computer lacks spellcheck) Apendages would be my guess.

Appendages. You just forgot the double 'p'.

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