[WingedWolf]

Okay, here goes.

Heartsong
I find myself in nature,
In a soothing, gentle breeze,
I find myself in singing birds, and leaping fish, and trees.

I find myself in freedom,
in the soaring eagle's eye,
I find myself in boundless plains,
beneath an open sky.

I find myself in mountains,
in canyons strong and deep,
I find myself in howling wolves,
in herons, ducks, and sheep.

I find myself in family,
in the feeling you belong.
I find myself in loyal pets,
I find myself in song.

And I don't mean sing-songs, either. I mean real song, true song. The song of the heart. The song that rings through life itself, the most beautiful music in the world...

And that's that. I tried to capture this feeling...sort of what makes me feel strong and free and...like me. I'd really appreciate you telling me how I did with that.
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Okay. I didn't find my other one, but I wrote this recently and I like it a lot. Concrit always welcome, of course. Nature-lover, Kari? Well, then, I dedicate this one to you and our mutual friend Adurna Shrrg, hoping she'll get well soon and tell us what the Frith's going on.

To a Wolf, on Pride
If you, who mankind has despised,
Through stories and rumors, all of them lies,
Can lift up your head and have pride in your eyes
And howl your songs, so ancient, so new
And roll with your pups, play tag in the dew,
not let the world change your opinion of you,

Then I too can lift up my heart to the skies,
Ignore all the teasing and laughter and lies,
Hold my head proudly and simply be me
For we know, if we're just who we are,
we are free.

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I wrote this one today in art class. Tis not very good. NEED CONCRIT!!

In Defense Of Vultures Everywhere

A vulture is a raptor, did you know that?

A bird of prey, a falcon, like a hawk.

And yet our species always seems to fault them

because they choose to scavenge, not to hunt.

Perhaps they value life. Is that a fault now?

We look down on them because they do not kill?

Because, instead of causing more destruction,

they clean up after others have their fill?

They don't hunt, not because they are not able,

but because they realize that there's no need.

It's also rich for us to criticize them--

when was the last time you caught your own meat?

The bird of death, the leering, circling vulture,

is all that humans really seem to get.

But I've seen vultures swooping, diving, playful,

and that's not something I can soon forget.

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Well, that's that. Any reviews appreciated.

This post has been edited by WingedWolf: 30 January 2010 - 11:03 AM

[Kari]

I think it's pretty brilliant! Some lines seem a little forced, though, as if you pushed it to keep the rhyming pattern. Examples:

I find myself in howling wolves,
in herons, ducks, and sheep.

Other than that, it's a very exhilerating poem. Could be that I'm just tired, but that makes me think of fresh and light things, and a cool breeze.

[WingedWolf]

I think it's pretty brilliant! Some lines seem a little forced, though, as if you pushed it to keep the rhyming pattern. Examples:

I find myself in howling wolves,
in herons, ducks, and sheep.

Yes, I've heard that before, but there's something very nice about sheep. Peaceful, trusting, generally calming. I actually didn't just put sheep in there because it rhymed with deep--it was the other way around; I had to arrange the canyon bit so it ended with deep. I'm glad you liked it. I was kind of baring my soul there, so I'm glad the first response wasn't "that was horrible". "Exhilerating"- thank you very much! That means a lot to me. And I much prefer it to "horrific".

(You too? That's what it makes me think of, but I always thought that might just because, well, I wrote it.)

This post has been edited by WingedWolf: 12 November 2009 - 06:44 PM

[Blazing Elf]

In my opinion you did capture feeling. good job.
please write more.

This post has been edited by Blazing Elf: 14 August 2009 - 08:55 PM

[WingedWolf]

Thanks. I would have posted some of my other poems on here, but my computer crashed and erased EVERYTHING, and the only hard copy of my poem "Happiness" I gave to my friend, because it was a poem I wrote especially for her. If I can find it again, I'll post it.

[Kari]

I hope you can find it. It was really very beautiful. Something I can relate to, being a nature-lover myself.

[WingedWolf]

*blush* stop it, you're embarrassing me. Anyway, as you may have noticed, there's a new poem up. Like it? Suggestions? Please share. I wrote it for Creative Writing class, but I've wanted to write something like this for a long time.

[Candy Spots]

That was really beautiful, WW! Good job.

[giorgia]

Wow!!! Awesome poem pal. Eventhough it's simple, you capture the emotions needed.
Expecting for more.

[WingedWolf]

*laugh* I might not be posting a poem here for a little while-I'm working on a fanfic and an original story at the same time while getting ready to move to Germany, and as you can probably tell, I really only write poetry when I feel inspired. Maybe after the move, I'll write something about what Germany feels like--I've actually got a few scattered lines in my head right now-something about knowing that this is where I belong-but I think I'd have to be there to really know what to say. Thanks for the support, though, guys, it means a lot to me.

[Arget Kveykva]

I really like the poem, it rhymes well and everything.

[Kari]

Oh my God.. Winged, that last one was just.. unbelievable! XD Firstof all, I'm touched. XD Secondly, I can just FEEl what you mean! Hlding our head up.. Ignoring what the others think.. It's ust what I like best about people, and what I'm doing now with some morons badgering me.

the rhyming scheme, when there, was ingenious and.. I can't really thikof a bad thing against it!

[WingedWolf]

Wow. You have no idea what that means to me. (And ^this^ from someone (in)famous for their intolerance of excessive praise!)

It's just what I like best about people, and what I'm doing now with some morons badgering me.

Keep your chin up, Kari, we all love you!

[Kari]

I know! Isn't it ironic? XD BUT, in my defense, this is a poem I can't pick apart. ^-^"

[WingedWolf]

Aaww, that's sweet...and, no, I don't find it ironic we all love you (just kidding!) Well, like I said, that kind of praise from you, of all people, really makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside. Don't worry, I won't let it go to my head, difficult as it may be!