[Brisngerman]

This is my first fanfic so here goes.

Prolouge

Over the Hadrac Desert, Saphira and Eragon flew above the sand dunes, along with Murtagh and Thorn.

Are you sure you want to do this Little One?

I'm sure. But I'll need almost all your energy.

Let us do it.

Yes.

"Murtagh, I'll need about half your energy." Eragon said. "Fine. Here." Murtagh replied. Then he transfered his energy to him.

Thorn, I will need some of your energy as well. Saphira said.

Can we just get this over with?! Thorn said impaitantly. Then he as well gave Saphira energy.

Now, Saphira. Eragon said.
Then they became one and combined their energy to form a complex spell that would change Murtagh and Thorn's personality so that their true names would change. It strained Eragon to go on, but he did anyways. About a half-hour took place and then the slow decrease in energy ceased, and all was peacefull.

"Eragon are you alright?" Murtagh asked worriedly.

"I'm fine. And I'm also sure the spell worked because you just asked me if I'm alright." Eragon replied.

So, now what?Thorn asked.

We should go back to the Varden. Eragon replied.

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[Mane Minister]

Okay in my opinion, but this is supposed to be in Inheritance Fan-Fiction not General Fan-Fiction.

Chapters are usually longer to, but nice start.

How did Murtagh get free of Galbatorix's clutches? That should mark the beginning of your story.

This post has been edited by Orange Dragon Rider: 17 August 2009 - 08:46 PM

[Pixel]

Yeah, I'll move this. Also, Brisingerman, your signature is too big, please either remove the text or the image. Thanks.

[Brisngerman]

Okay in my opinion, but this is supposed to be in Inheritance Fan-Fiction not General Fan-Fiction.

Chapters are usually longer to, but nice start.

How did Murtagh get free of Galbatorix's clutches? That should mark the beginning of your story.

Orange Dragon Rider I'm just making it up as I go along so I don't really know how. I guess all that energy and everything overpowered Galbatorix's spell or something. Here's the real prolouge.

Prolouge Version 2.0

Oromis and Glaedr died.

How about that?


Invasion

Nar Gharzhog looked up at the sky. About five minutes later a small red speck apeared in the sky, it grew and grew. Then Nar Gharzhog suddenly panicked at the sight. He then ran to Nasauda's pavilliion. "Murtagh and Thorn are here!" Gharzhog said. "That means soldiers are not far behind." Nasuada replied. "Sound the the trumpets! Prepare all men for battle! Hey, where's Eragon?"
"With the Elves remember?"
"Oh, that's right. We're dead."
"Maybe. Get a spellcaster to scry Eragon."
"Carn! Trianna!" Then, (of course) Carn and Trianna entered the pavillion "My Lady." Carn said, "Oh, you do know we're being attacked by a bunch of mad soldiers, right?" "Yes, I do." Nasauda replied. "I need you two to scry Eragon and Saphira and get them here as soon as possible."
"Yes, My Lady." Trianna said.
"Carn, while you're here, where's Roran? We need him."
"He's getting ready for battle."
"Good."

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Eragon was flying above the Elven camp, as he would every day to watch for Murtagh, Thorn, or anyone else that could be a threat. Eragon felt as if he could just fall asleep. Then,

Eragon!

Arya?

My Mother needs you, NOW!!

I'm coming.

Saphira then turned around and landed by Izslani's tent. Once he walked in, he saw Izsalndi(of course), Arya, suprisingly Vanir, an elf he trained with. And on the mirror was Trianna. "Trianna?" Eragon asked.
"Yes. Nasauda wants you, Saphira, and Arya to come to the Vardens camp as soon as possible."
"Okay, I'll be their."
"Also, bring a few reinforcements if you can."
"I'll try." Then the mirror cam to it's normal apearance. "We best be off then." Arya said. "We probably should." Eragon replied, "Vanir?"
"Yes?" Vanir said.
"The Varden could use an elf of your talents. Would you like to come with us?" There was a silence. Then,
"Fine, I'll go. But straight back here afterwards."
"Eragon?" Izslandi said.
"Yes?"
"Do NOT get into any trouble. Arya is needed here as well. Just get to the Varden, then go right back. Understood?"
"Understood. Now let's be off."

Okay, then. How about we do this: I made the prolouge and 1st chapter, so now you, yes you! Can finish it.

This post has been edited by Brisngerman: 18 August 2009 - 02:22 PM

[Aramus Shurtugal]

Wait, do you mean like post the next chapter?

[Brisngerman]

Yeah, pretty much. I don't really thing that my idea will go well now so why not?