[I amArya theprincess]

[/size]As Claire went to get the items from the farmers market, she saw Willey standing outside the market. So she said: hello Willey. Willey just stood there starring at her and said: ``are you OK``? ``How is Tom`` Claire said. ``OK, why``? ``I don`t know, just wondering``. just then, I heard the news paper boy say: Extra, Extra, Read all about it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and thats when I was buying a news paper. it said: that 3 dragon eggs have been stolen from the rare, mighty Dragon. I was so suprised how some one could ever get passed the dragon. so I ran home to tell my mother, and brothers.

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This is absolutely too hard to follow. And the story is also in the wrong section.

When there is a conversation, press enter for each new line of text. Such as,

"I'm very tired," Bob said.

"Me too," Sarah cried.

Also, you jump into the story so fast, it practically leaves the reader dumbfounded. My brain didn't catch up with what I was reading until the end of your post.

Please repost this when you actually have one chapter done, and not just a few sentences. Also make sure to post it in Inheritance Fan-fiction, which is the right place for this.