[Byakko]

Well, after school I want to be a musician, so I decided to write a few songs and sometimes record them. So here's one I wrote a month or so ago.

And Still I Awake

The sky is calm, the stars are bright
And still I awake
Cold, hard, rasping breath - dreams full of plight
And still I awake
The comforting breath of another, warm against my cheek
And still I awake
Close my eyes, and whisper "Let me sleep"
But still I awake.

Horror dreams,
Of blood and gore
The room is spinning,
My abated breath
Sheets are tossed to the floor
Drenched in cold sweat,
Beads of death

(And still I awake)

Cool, safe, cloudless night
And still I awake
Fears materialised, terrors real
and still I awake
I wish for sleep, but it does not come
and still I awake
Pray for morning, pray for Sun
But still I awake.

---

The Joker, The Mime, The Riddler, The Bard

The Joker, the Mime
The Ridder, the Bard
The man tips the scales,
The woman holding the cards

Those who jest, those who weep
Those who scream while the gunman creeps
Those who sing, to lull some sleep

Those who fight, those who die
Those who shy from the Eagle's Eye
And those whose time draws nigh

To bless, to oppose
until blood runs cold
Forever Red in tales of old

The Joker, The Mime
The Riddler and the Bard
All held in time,
forever held in a cold depth's chime


---

Sentimentality

Shake your fears
until the disappear
Close your eyes, block your ears
Don't show any tears

Don't lower your grade
Despite being afraid
the path's yet to be laid
And the bed is yet to be made

Wake from your "reality"
Crushing your mentality
Breaking any formality
Having no Sentimentality

Don't become regulatory
Never stop the search for Glory
Become auditory
Make your own story

Never diverse
to your dreams, reimburse
conquer any curse
into the dream, immerse

Wake from your "reality"
Crushing your mentality
Breaking any formality
Having no Sentimentality

Show no brutality
show no sentimentality
Have no abnormality
or lose your vitality

---

Summer Sunrise

The Summer Sunrise has begun
With colours of wonder
Basking in the glow,
Of the warm sun, we're under

Piercing the darkness of night
Swirling colours and dreams
Bring nothing but delight
Under the warm sun

Summer Sunrise,
Ever so bright
I've won first prize
With such a sight

Watching this, with you,
A moment grasped, a moment lost
Seeing every hue
There's no price, no cost

Summer Sunrise,
Ever so bright
I've won first prize
With such a sight

Summer Sunrise,
Ever so bright
I've won first prize
With such a sight

---

I Dropped My Noodle On The Floor

*Note: Not supposed to be taken seriously, lol*

I dropped my noodle
It was BBQ Beef
So my wife gave me
A lettuce Leaf

I Dropped My Noodle
On the floor
Now there's no way
I want it, anymore

When I,
Lost my noodle
I think,
I've gone Cadoodle

I Dropped My Noodle
On the floor
Now there's no way
I want it, anymore

Now I've got my noodle
From the Floor
And I seriously
Don't want it anymore

---

Music Keeps The Demons At Bay

Music keeps the demons at bay
Out of the house, out of my head
Music keeps the demons away
Out of my room, away from my bed

Play it loud, play it fast
play it soft, make it last
These demons tresspass
On my mind, they've amassed

Music keeps the demons far
Out of sight, out of mind
Locked, behind cold bars
Far, where I cannot find

Music keeps my heart safe
Where cold icy hands,
Cannot reach to chafe
Obey their commands

Play it loud, play it fast
play it soft, make it last
These demons tresspass
On my mind, they've amassed

Music keeps my mind sane
"It's all a bad dream!"
So there's not refrain
Let me change the scene

Play it quick, play it keen
Save my soul, keep it clean
Rhythm and blues
What else can I lose?

Play it loud, play it fast
play it soft, make it last
These demons tresspass
On my mind, they've amassed

---

A Lullaby For My Girl

Sleep now, don't you cry
Listen to my lullaby
Let it send you to sleep
Into dreams so deep

We can let the world go by
Just hear my lullaby
wait for cruelty to die
Singing your lullaby

We'll hide from the world
With the lullaby for my girl

Let your fears slip away
Saved for another day
Kiss them "goodbye"
and sleep to my lullaby

The World's too organised to make sense
It comes at our expense
But let it all fly by
and listen to my lullaby

We'll hide from the world
With the lullaby for my girl

We'll hide from the world
With the lullaby for my girl

Any comments and criticism is much appreciated!

This post has been edited by Byakko: 10 November 2009 - 01:45 PM

[witch168]

Wow! So much! You don't have to write them all at once, that tends to keep some readers away. (I did that, so I'm at fault, but it's a fact, I'm sorry to say. People are lazy.)
Anyway, your poems rhyme really well. My favorite one is: The Joker, The Mime, The Riddler, The Bard

Those who fight, those who die
Those who shy from the Eagle's Eye
To those whose time draws nigh

I think the last line is comprehensible, but awkwardly phrased. Change 'to' to 'and'. (It just sounds more consistent that way.) I happen to know that 'nigh' is something like 'near' but a lot of people don't know that, so thats the main reason why it's confusing.

btw, what's the chorus for: I Dropped My Noodle On The Floor ?

[SnapeandMurtagh ROCK]

'Music Keeps The Demons At Bay' is awesome! I can totally relate to escaping from the mess of life, into music

'Sentimentality' started off well, but then it became as if you just threw rhyming words together;

"Never diverse
to your dreams, reimburse"

???
I like the idea though, it's what I'm struggling with too.

'And still I awake' reminds me of Eragon's dreams!

'I Dropped My Noodle On The Floor'

[giorgia]

hey I liked all of it but the best one for me was 'and still I awake'. The secong one though was 'Music keeps the demons in bay'. I like the meaning of those two which I will keep for myself. .

[Byakko]

Thanks for the comments! This'll take a bit longer than I thought to reply but *cracks knuckles* every comment is appreciated!

I think the last line is comprehensible, but awkwardly phrased. Change 'to' to 'and'. (It just sounds more consistent that way.) I happen to know that 'nigh' is something like 'near' but a lot of people don't know that, so thats the main reason why it's confusing

Ah, I'll change it. I'd never noticed it until you said so.

The Chorus for "I dropped my noodle on the floor" must've not been copied from the other site I posted them on, I'll put that in too.

Also, that's nowhere near everything I've written

'Music Keeps The Demons At Bay' is awesome! I can totally relate to escaping from the mess of life, into music

I know what you mean. Music is the only thing that everybody loves. I've seen kids who's lives have been destroyed dance and smile because of music.

'Sentimentality' started off well, but then it became as if you just threw rhyming words together;
"Never diverse
to your dreams, reimburse"
???
I like the idea though, it's what I'm struggling with too.

It was at a time when people were really trying to get me to have a "Back Up", you'll have heard the "But what if that course choice doesn't work out?" argument against any sort of dream. It's all about not giving up, and if you ever lose track, reimbursing time and energy into your dreams. It's what I was thinking when I wrote it anyways...

hey I liked all of it but the best one for me was 'and still I awake'. The secong one though was 'Music keeps the demons in bay'. I like the meaning of those two which I will keep for myself.

Thanks! It's always great to know that people make different interpretations of what you've written!

So here are a couple more:

Steel Blue Eyes

Things I cannot hide,
Looks and stares pass me by,
Want to lay and hide,
My own mind, I can't find

Clouds appear, don't disappear
We like the rain
So sit down,and refrain
from leaving me

A look from your eyes;
mystifies
the things I never realised:
Your steel blue eyes.

You gotta listen to my words
When I have to be heard
I gotta reach the sky
Away from steel blue eyes

The smell from your perfume,
flowers in bloom
How can I lie,
to Steel blue eyes?

A look from your eyes;
mystifies
the things I never realised:
Your steel blue eyes.

---

Dogs of War

Dogs of War
Are sent marching in
What do they look for?
Starved, unbelievably thin.

Dogs of War
Must protect the cub
Growing from a nub.
To the dog of War

Dogs of War
Are sent marching in
What do they look for?
Starved, unbelievably thin.

Must keep their looks
Underline fake purposes
Of making peace with guns
Dogs of war must be the ones

Dogs of War
Are made of hate
So make no mistake
Run, very far

Dogs of War
Are sent marching in
What do they look for?
Starved, unbelievably thin.

Dogs of War
Won’t negotiate
And they won’t hesitate
To let you die
So they may live

This post has been edited by Byakko: 10 November 2009 - 01:44 PM

[giorgia]

Steel Blue Eyes

Things I cannot hide,
Looks and stares pass me by,
Want to lay and hide,
My own mind, I can't find

Clouds appear, don't disappear
We like the rain
So sit down,and refrain
from leaving me

A look from your eyes;
mystifies
the things I never realised:
Your steel blue eyes.

You gotta listen to my words
When I have to be heard
I gotta reach the sky
Away from steel blue eyes

The smell from your perfume,
flowers in bloom
How can I lie,
to Steel blue eyes?

A look from your eyes;
mystifies
the things I never realised:
Your steel blue eyes.

I just thought about it as 'eyes are the windows to the soul".Oh yeah, that's just what I thought. Also, I found it somewhat mysterious. I dunno why, but yeah.

Dogs of War

Dogs of War
Are sent marching in
What do they look for?
Starved, unbelievably thin.

Dogs of War
Must protect the cub
Growing from a nub.
To the dog of War

Dogs of War
Are sent marching in
What do they look for?
Starved, unbelievably thin.

Must keep their looks
Underline fake purposes
Of making peace with guns
Dogs of war must be the ones

Dogs of War
Are made of hate
So make no mistake
Run, very far

Dogs of War
Are sent marching in
What do they look for?
Starved, unbelievably thin.

Dogs of War
Won’t negotiate
And they won’t hesitate
To let you die
So they may live

Are you referring on those wild dogs?..Oh that's scary!! "won't negotiate and they won't hesitate to let you die so they may live". Yap, frightening it is.

[Byakko]

I just thought about it as 'eyes are the windows to the soul".Oh yeah, that's just what I thought. Also, I found it somewhat mysterious. I dunno why, but yeah.

Awesome! I never thought it'd come off as mysterious!

Are you referring on those wild dogs?..Oh that's scary!! "won't negotiate and they won't hesitate to let you die so they may live". Yap, frightening it is.

Not really. The line "The dogs of war" comes from the play Julius Ceasar, by Shakespeare. But it's a common-ish saying where I come from - "Let loose the Dogs of War" - I interpret it as somebody who is brainwashed by a society, religion or anything. And because they've been made to think that way, they think everybody else should be the same, and stop you from achieving anything. Dogs are obedient, so they are - in a metaphorical sense - Dogs of war.

Thanks for the comment!

Twisted Wings

With these twisted wings
Who can tell what the future brings
Cold tidings of war?
Can we tell these things?

With these twisted wings
I cannot fly
To the sky
Or any other precious things

With these twisted wings
Who can tell what the future brings
Cold tidings of war?
Can we tell these things?

When these twisted wings
Begin to finally heal
Who knows what I’ll feel
Like the future
We cannot tell what life will bring

With these twisted wings
Who can tell what the future brings
Cold tidings of war?
Can we tell these things?

Near this dying swan
And it’s twisted wings
I can see many things
Look away and they’re gone
Who knows what the future brings

With these twisted wings
Who can tell what the future brings
Cold tidings of war?
Can we tell these things?

[SnapeandMurtagh ROCK]

Not really. The line "The dogs of war" comes from the play Julius Ceasar, by Shakespeare. But it's a common-ish saying where I come from - "Let loose the Dogs of War" - I interpret it as somebody who is brainwashed by a society, religion or anything. And because they've been made to think that way, they think everybody else should be the same, and stop you from achieving anything. Dogs are obedient, so they are - in a metaphorical sense - Dogs of war.

Yeah I remember that part! Did the play in school. That was the first thing that came to mind when I read it! Also reminds me of... who says, "Mischief, thou art afoot"?
Very nice, and scary!

Check out my poem too (there's a link in my sig), would really appreciate comments

[Byakko]

Yeah I remember that part! Did the play in school. That was the first thing that came to mind when I read it! Also reminds me of... who says, "Mischief, thou art afoot"?
Very nice, and scary!

Mark Antony

Sure, I'll check out your poem

Love Hurts

Love kills, Love thrills
Love sends, cold chills
Love breaks, Love takes
Love makes, Love aches

To know, to learn
From you,
And the things
You do

To see, to hear
To worry and fear
To hide, disguise
To speak, to paralyse

Love kills, Love thrills
Love sends, cold chills
Love breaks, Love takes
Love makes, Love aches

Youth, truth
Lies, I'm chastised
You care? Don't dare
To share? You're not there

An erruption, corruption?
Between us, it's just disruption
You reveal? Try conceal
What do you feel?

Love kills, Love thrills
Love sends, cold chills
Love breaks, Love takes
Love makes, Love aches

Love hurts, love stings
Love breaks all things
Love hurts, love burns
Love unites? Love Fights.

[Byakko]

I don't know if this'll be like...the easiest thing to understand ever, or really complicated...so yeah...

I went to the place
Where the trees shine with stars
Where the Music plays
Where our souls lack scars

But where were you,
when that woefully happy tune
Came crashing down, spinning around
And even lit up the moon?

Amy, come see the lights
That shine through the night
And give such delight
That sends me to insanity

This post has been edited by Byakko: 28 November 2009 - 05:31 PM

[Blazing Elf]

Nice poem I liked the third stanza cause the words flowed nicely and cause they rhymed and I found it easy to understand.

[Byakko]

Thanks! I changed it a little bit, I think it sounds a little better now